When everything goes wrong

What is it with hope
And good dreams too
Trying to fool everyone
But the fool is you
Trying to find a way out
Never staying inside
Thinking it's a good place
Somewhere to hide
Grow up I tell you
I've been in your shoe
The road you're taking
I took it before you
There's no path there
It'll lead you nowhere
And you'll get lost
Just stuck in there
Wonderland isn't a place of peace
A world of war and evilness it is
Your beautiful eyes will see the truth
Everyone you loved lying to you
But you need them, you know that too
So wake up now, forget what I told you
And don't get lost, this path isn't for you

Reviews

[Nigel Newman]

Hi Cara.

Hmm. Well that's pretty clear then - I'll go this way - or maybe, umm, the other way. It's my decision. I might trust your care for me but I don't trust your intentions. Who's deluding who? They're your experience not mine. It's my decision ... isn't it? Whaddya mean what do I want?

I may not quite have captured above what this poem says to me, but it took me back to my teenage and early 20s years. Let's just say I was sceptical about advice from older people, but equally by no means sure that what my peers were doing would be my way. I followed. I drifted. I didn't even know what to dream about - teenage boy fantasies about Hollywood actresses but that's not the same at all! Whereas in here I sense a true and deep yearning to try and plot the best course forward. You'll sometimes hear someone say 'I knew since I was 7 yrs old that I wanted to ....' but there aren't that many of those folk. Most of us take wrong turnings, learn the good parts of those blind alleys, then evolve ... and take more wrong turnings! So good luck - and I inferred from your DOUBT acrostic, don't let doubt govern you. Enjoy the ride!

So all the above rambling may mean absolutely nothing for you, Cara, but hopefully it shows that your poem has impact and provokes personal reflection. Nice work!

Regards
Nigel

[Cara]

it means alot to me actually, i'm glad to see that i'm not the only one who felt this way.
yes i'm very sceptical and i hate it but i cant help it. i doubt everything, think twice before making any move and still get somethings wrong or make real mistakes. but i know that it's normal.
i wrote this one because i wanted to read one of my poems to my sister and she didn't want to hear it, i was so angry and just wanted to something. i found a paper and a pen and wrote the words down.and instead of being angry at her i was angry at myself, and i was kind of talking to myself in this poem
thank you for reading it nad im glad you liked it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Everyone you loved lying to you
But you need them, you know that too"
This is a realistic write-up! And an eye-opener for those of us trying to live in a fantasy world or as you put it 'Wonderland'... This was relatable enough for me.. Good work!

[Cara]

thank you XD glad you liked it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome ☺

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and honest words dear Cara.
"Wonderland isn't a place of peace
A world of war and evilness it is
Your beautiful eyes will see the truth
Everyone you loved lying to you "
The above lines. Realistic and true. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Cara]

Thank you for reading. Glad you liked it XD

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome.