Chapter One (legend and legacy)

The legend say's: " thousand years ago, when earth's and Castrlay's gates were opened a cross each other, and anyone could cross the Castrelay world, one of the earth protectors (khyron) decided to take over both worlds. Only few agreed, the servers of khyron, 
and people of both worlds didn't approve, earth was protected by it's own king, who didn't help Castrelay from the hands of khyron. Castrelay's king was weak and in his last days of life. But he was wise, and opened the destiny book. destiny book is a book of legends and magic, it was created since life started in Castrelay,by the original witches of Castrelay. Humans from different parts of earth were chosen from the start to save Castrelay from the hands of khyron and his servants. the chosens did help Castrelay, andwere made as it's kings and queens,  they hid Castrelay in the middle of the sea and khyron thought that the Castrelay  world was over".

Now the chosens legacy are the only ones who can enter Castrelay and go back to world as normal people, but the only way to do that was by a pocket watch that when you click it or get called, it stops time on earth and takes you to

Castrelay. The chosens were afraid for there children so no one ever knew about Castrelay or the pocket watch, not even the chosens children. The legend also says that the chosen's will return again for another war. andif the seeker never been called from inside, no one of the chosen's will be able to enter the Castrelay world.

  2013

"schoolbell rings"

Adam: I forgot my jacket man, let's go back to the lab

Leo: but the match will start any minute now

Adam: what match?

Leo: the volleyball match

Adam: we'll take it and go

Leo: just make it fast

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Eva: Lunch!! I'm so hungry

Inna: where do you go with food?

Eva: I don't know, what are they serving?

Inna: today they are serving burgers, pizza.

Eva: Pizza it is

Inna(laughing): thought so, i'll go enter the competition

Eva (eating): you go do that.

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Hayden: come on, will miss the competition

Holly: what about the question you asked?

Hayden: we'll study later, come on

Holly: okey coming

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Max: finally. This teacher is driving me crazy!!

Zeron(laughing): they all drive you crazy, let's go down, there is a volleyball match.

Max: really?! Who is playing?

Zeron(running): you are, hahahaha

Max: wait what? I don't even know how to play, hey come here (runs after Zeron)

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Max: 16 years old, fire

Adam: 16 years old, flying, seeker.

Leo: 16 years old,  disappearing.

Zeron: 16 years old, moving through places.

Hayden: 16years old, controlling water and wind.

Inna: 16years old, controlling space and mind.

Eva: 16 years old, shape shifter (that is why she could understand animals) 

Holly :  16 years old, witch.

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One of theteachers hanged the teams list on the wall. The first team was made of (4) players: "Zeron, Leo, Hayden, and Inna", and the second was also made of (4) players: "Axel, Jon, Anna, and Emma".

The competition continued for like an hour and half,and it was ended by the the winning of the first team.

" Max, zeron, leo, Adam,Inna,Eva, Holly,  Hayden" were speaking:

Zeron:"great game, let's go celebrate!!!"

Max:" the only way you are celebrating is by going to M.r Allen's class"

Hayden:" oh, i'm skipping"

Adam and Leo:" we are too"

Inna: "i'm not"

Eva:"come on Inna!!  you won"

Inna:" i guess one class won't do much, i'm in"

Zeron:" see everybody is skipping, me too"

Max: "okay fine, i'm in"

(everybody looking at Holly) Hayden: "Holly?"

Holly: "don't look at me, i hate his class"

Max: "great, where too?"

Leo: "i'm hungry"

Zeron: "let's order"

Hayden:" i know a good place we can go to"

Leo: "but we order first"

Adam: "so here is what are we going to do, Max, Leo, Holly, and Inna, you go bring food, and Holly you know the place Hayden is talking about right?"

Holly: "i do"

Eva:" so we go wait there"

Adam: "yep"

Hayden:" let's go before anyone notice"

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Inna, Holly, Max, Leo, went to get some food, while Hayden, Eva,Zeron, and Adam went to a garden near the river.

Inna: "what are we going to order"?

Max:"you mean from where are we going to order?"Inna:"

Leo:" let's take some pizza and coke"

Inna:" we have already ate that"

Max:"what about burgers?"

Leo:" no, we eat that yesterday"

now what?"

Holly:"stop, all of you"

Max: "what did you forget?"

Holly:" your brains. I'll order both with some c**k, what do you think?"

Leo:" I'm in, but how?"

Holly:" phone of course"

She picksup her phone and calls somebody.

Holly:"Hey, Lely!!, what's up? Oh really?? Yes I did that to. Ummm anyway can I order2 pizza box and 8 burgers?"

Leo:" make them 9"

Holly:" okey make them 9, and c**k, yeah sure I'll be waiting for samy in. hold on" turns to Max "where are we now?"

Max:" 27th street, near the cross road next to our school"

Holly:" go that? Yeah , thanks girl, laters" and she closed the phone, then say: "done, now we wait for like 10 minutes here".

'Meanwhile'

Hayden:" okay, so we are going to a garden near the river"

"river!!" said adam, Zeron, and Eva in a shock

"yes, river..... i think" replied Hayden.

Zeron:" where did you find this river?"

Hayden:" when i was young,my dad used to take us there every weekend"

Adam:" why did you choose that place?"

Eva:" easy, no one knows about it"

Hayden (smiling):" Exactly"

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when they arrived to the gardenMax, Leo, Holly, and Inna got the food and were on there way.

Eva:" i have a photo of this place"(to be continued)

Hayden:" you do?!"

Eva:" yes i'll bring it tomorrow"

Max and Zeron:" bring what?

Eva:" i have a photo of this place"

Inna:" well, we couldn't choose between burgers and pizza"

Zeron and Eva:" what did you bring then?"

Holly:" both"

Leo: "and we bought some coca cola too"

Adam:"what are we waiting for? i'm starving"

Eva:" let's sit here"

after they finished eating, they sat down under trees

Max:"congratulations for the winning team, because of you we might get detention tomorrow"

(everybody laughs)

Zeron:" well.. if we got detention, glad i helped"

Max:"shut up!!!"

Inna:" so how did you guys meet?"

Max:" Zeron and i are like best friends since like... kindergarten,he is like my brother"

Zeron:" oh really!! i thought you said you wouldn't recognize me if you saw me in the street"

Max:" true, i won't"

(everybody laughs)

holly:" Hayden and i are Best friends since kindergarten too"

Hayden:" even more, our parents are like bestfriends"

Inna:" nice,me and Eva are too"

Adam:" well i don't know Leo"

Leo:" weird i don't too"

Adam:" but we were friends since kindergarten too"

Leo:" two?? i thought we were three!!"

Adam:" forgot to mention,he is very funny"

Inna:" what time is it now?"

Zeron:" like 4 or soo"

"Hayden" school is over"

Max:"so?"

Hayden:" i have to go"

Inna:" me too"

Zeron:" so we meet tomorrow at school?"

Eva:" till then" Everybody:" till then"

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Next day at school Adam:" Leo, i have some good...  i mean bad news"

Leo:"what?"

Adam:" we are detentioned"

Leo:" not again"

Hayden and Holly (walking):" Hey!!"

Leo,Adam:" Hey!!"

Adam:" did you hear?"

Hayden:" Hear what?"

Leo:" we are...."

Adam:"detention" Holy:" What?"

Hayden:" i can't believe it"

Zeron:" believe what?... Hey man" (shaking hands with Leo)

Leo:" Su'p we are detentioned"

Max:" i told you soo"

Eva:" don't tell me we are detentioned"

Holy:" we are" Inna:" that's okey, the one who will watch us wont stay in class for long"

" How do you know?" Max asked Inna:" i have my ways" Eva:" she's just been detentioned alot"

Max:" ways you said"

Inna:" shut up"

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(when school was over)

M.R Lucks detention time.

M.R Lucks:" i'm going to read the names now Leo (here) welcome again Leo, what did you do this time? (killed a cat) Very funny, I've never seen this one before Zeron (here) welcome son, Michel (here) always, Eva (here),Tom (here), Kathren (here), LiLy (here), Hayden (here)congratulations for the match, what brought you here? (i helped killing the cat), ooh run away too, Mad (here) and proud (certainly) 'everybody laughs', Alex (here) we missed you, Holy (here) you run away too? (yup) good , wellcome dear, Justen (here), ooh here's a name i love In.. ( yes yes i'm here) always my dear"

Inna (to Zeron):" we call him old M.R Lucks"

Zeron:" i can see why "

Max:" why what?"

Zeron (whispering):" why does they call him old M.R Lucks"

Hayden( giggling):"who called him that"

Inna:" Justen"            Justen:" Ha?"

Max:" nothing man"              Justen" Ha"

Eva:" what's wrong with him?"

Inna:" hi is on facebook" every body:" haa"

Justin:" says, he'll go out any minute now"

Inna:" okey"

M.R Lucks goes out because of a phone call " don't want to hear any word now, keep it quiet" he said before going

Inna:" now we can do whatever we want"

Max:" i'm starting to love detention"

Zeron:" i already love it" (everybody laughs)

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Reviews

[XxEmo_WulfiexX]

Alright so I very much enjoy the total overall idea of your story. Like Avatar meets Narnia. As someone who has shaped his style of writing over the years. I will give you a few tips. Choose maybe a small group of main characters, jumping around to much confuses the reader. Another tip. Show don't tell. Details are a must but you have to build a setting with words. Well I hope this is a help. Also it's good to find an editor to help with getting points across and correcting grammar. Great job still. I think it's an amazing work in progress. I hope it was helpful.

[Cara]

thank you, i'll try my best to do what you said, thank you for your help XD