Blocked

Initial thoughts, will tidy later

Blocked

again

that familiar refrain

of the gibbering human washing machine;

"As jober as a sudge"

one foot in front of t'other

trying in vain

to link feet and brain

touching either side of the street

slipping and swaying

a rickety bridge

connecting shore and island

intrepid travellers fear to cross

before crashing

burning

wailing

"take me drunk I'm home"

Reviews

[Zanne]

great piece of writing, it reminds me of my teen years. well done.

[RayXor]

it got drunk across before the last line nice job

[Jamie R. Robillard Sr.]

Lol, how I can relate to this piece. Clever and witty. Good write, thanks for the RR.

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, that last line was pretty hilarious wasn't it? I have had those nights. Great job my friend.

[ShaDavi]

Exciting!
I really enjoyed this piece...great job!

[s y e]

Hahaa, you make me laugh, dude. I loved this one!!!!

[Pól]

Tnxs ... ahem ... dude

[sherifa]

it's kinda funny I'm soliking it!

[Matching Socks]

Lol!!
Love it................

[Pól]

Thanks Ana

[Mari K]

Lol I like this. It's a very sobering look at the intoxicated people I see every day.😜 Good job

[Frieda P]

Sobering stuff, that last line cracked me up, very clever paulo....isn't it supposed to be take me home, I'm drunk...haha Cheers.