Runaway truck

Stopped ...

dead

in my tracks

by beauty

that, by words

could never be described.

Smashes me

into a hundred thousand tiny pieces

as if I were

hit ...

by a runaway truck.

 

Your lovely lovely face

deprived me of oxygen

stole my breath

and strangled my last gasps,

but,

for that vision

I gladly surrender my life

and to you, I offer

my soul

my heart

my devotion

my love

for all eternity.

 

© Paul O' Neill 2012

Reviews

[Carolann Dowsett]

Love at first sight, beautiful and beautifully written

[John]

I love love's overstatement.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Your beauty took my breath away. I am totally and unconditionally, deeply, passionately in love with you.

[Pól]

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[Frieda P]

Your words hit me like a truck, lucky woman who this read belongs to, sweet :)

[Pól]

thank u so much

[Emberlorna]

This is so magnificently beautiful Paulo, and is hands down the best romantic write I've seen in a while. I wish I could say more but I am awestruck. Just lovely :}

[Pól]

thank you Emberlorna

[KAOlmsted]

Oh I love this...what a great piece! You've seriously managed to describe the feeling perfectly...that moment when you see somebody and they are so ridiculously beautiful you just feel...smashed. Fantastic job, paulo...

[Pól]

thanks Kimmer- it was easy for me though, as i get that feeling every morning...
when I look at myself in the mirror!!

[KAOlmsted]

:-D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your using something so basic and really unpoetic as a Runaway Truck...and them making it so powerfully poetical and full of love...

i felt run over, in a good way.

jacob

[Pól]

thank you , Jacob

[Circe]

love the ferocity of the imagery in the runaway truck... big blinding headlights and crashing speeds!

your words are so perfect, nothing has ever been more perfect than this.

[Pól]

its far from perfect, but thank you so much for saying so. I take it as a real compliment coming from a writer as talented as you.
PS I made a few changes... hope you approve.

[Circe]

yeah I think it reads more fluidly with these changes... and the stopped part makes you pause, it's a great effect.
I love this completely!

[Pól]

thank u ,Circe

[emmajoy]

For a start, a great title for the content! A romantic rush of a poem, seems absolutely sincere and that's what matters, don't you think '.. strangled my last gasps ..'

[Pól]

thank you EJ