N'er could be

Pissed when I wrote this, so apologies if its no good.

I love her

as no-one else

although we two

n'er could be.

 

So I basked

in the warmth of her glow

her radiance brilliant

the most lovely creature

any place she'd ever been.

 

And I asked

that she know me

and allow

I to know her

but she never heard

the ardour in my voice

nor the hurt

in my heart.

© Paul O' Neill 2012

Reviews

[lisat]

Such a shame, but her loss.

[Circe]

wow.. very exquisite sentiments... you're such a romantic. lol @ "pissed when I wrote this"

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I would have to agree if you write like this when you are pissed, well you need to more often! This piece is so sad and tender. And yes, it too touches a spot on my heart as well. There is an eloquence here that becomes you.
"And I asked
that she know me
and allow
I to know her
but she never heard"
This is so heart breaking to read. And especially in the first part in the piece when you say
"I love her
Like no one else"
These words are pure, from the heart - no hidden agenda there.
The 3rd stanza, i really felt a longing, a longing to be with her, eve though you knew it was never meant to be. Wonderfully penned. For someone who is pissed you write with a passion in your heart.

[Pól]

Thank u so much k. Your reviews are amazing. Thank you for putting so much into this

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

I believe that if you take the time to read you should take the time to put an effort into a review :) So you are most welcome. I like to give as much feedback as possible. And if I am off on something, hey don't be shy - call me out on it :) But I truly enjoy your writing. So I will put an effort into your reviews. I do apologize for not getting to them right away sometimes. But if you do have something you want me to read right away just shoot me a message and I will get to it faster :)

[Pól]

Thank u so much, k

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

:)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This leaves me a bit sad...perhaps, because it touches some memories.

[Pól]

Sorry,sb

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I like poetry that does that!

[KAOlmsted]

See? This is why I write when I'm drunk...and you should keep doing that, too. Look who I'm telling *laugh* (Insert obvious Irish joke here)

Seriously, Paulo, this was very coherent and not at all rambling or even close to bad. It was lovely. Thank you for sharing.

[Pól]

Thank you, K

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Paulo drunk or not the passion never gives way. This is a nice honest piece. Well written. Wish i could be so creative when pissed!

[Pól]

Thanks John. think I'll get pissed more often!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tryb scotch not that Irish stuff!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

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[Heather]

This is you when you're pissed? It seemed more like a man hurt that his passion for her went unseen...I can feel that pain, not someone pissed off.

I think if this is the type of poems you write when pissed... stay pissed :) Good write!!

[Pól]

Pissed as in too much to drink, H. Your kind words are much appreciated. Thanks

[afra]

its not bad at all ...i love it ...well done

[Pól]

Thanks