The secret reader

I wonder who it is

who views my musings

but never makes

yourself known

or tells me

what you feel.

 

I hope

the words I weave

the images I paint

and the stories I tell

comfort you

 

Go raidh milé maith agat

mó chara.

© Paul O' Neill 2012

Reviews

[lisat]

Oh sorry- I see now.

[lisat]

What do the last lines mean, please tell?

[Circe]

beautiful... so sweet.. how does the last part translate? your short poems are like little songbirds. "the smaller the bird, the louder the song".

[Pól]

Thank you so much, my friend.
And that's what the last bit means too.

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Don't we all wonder, and wonder why? Love the title on this, too. It makes it all seem so...so..."secret". ;)

[Pól]

Thank you, sb

[Daliah Valley]

Is that Irish keltic (celtic)?

[Pól]

Irish Gaelic, D

[Daliah Valley]

Oh. Is that a hard language to speak if you weren't raised with it or taught it at a young age. Sorry. I just find languages interesting. And Ireland. I plan to move there when the oppritunity presents itself. It so beautiful. (I feel like I am intruding on a speacial sort of invitation-only coffee shop club when I comment on these poems; they are so refined and mature.)

[Pól]

They are not that great, tbh. I can refer u to 5 brilliant writers on this site if u like

[Pól]

And theres. O intrusion at all. We all write for people to read

[Daliah Valley]

Yes! Refer away! I need to see them. And good. Because I was going to read and review anyway, intimidated or not.

[Pól]

Alpris, alexandria, kalypso, john & james mcfadden. They are all streetsahead of me

[KAOlmsted]

ahem...

*laugh*

[Daliah Valley]

Alrighty then. Thank you many times! I shall now be off tio explore. And I'll check your stuff out too, K. :)

[Pól]

It wasn'tan exhaustive list, u! Lol, You'll be in the next 5. Brilliant use of "ahem" yet again

[KAOlmsted]

me too you

[KAOlmsted]

Paulo, I know how much you love my...*ahem*

[Pól]

?

[Daliah Valley]

You guys are fun to watch. :P

[Pól]

I do, indeed. You should , ahem, write a poem called, "ahem"

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* I am so going to do that! You are my muse

[Pól]

Let me know when its ready, please

[KAOlmsted]

I absolutely will...is there a dedication in your future???

[Pól]

?

[Pól]

Whats a dedication?

[KAOlmsted]

*blink* did you just ask me what a dedication is??

[Pól]

Ahem.. Yes

[Pól]

Don't understand its use in this context

[KAOlmsted]

well...damn...you've stumped me. I have no idea how to respond to that. Let's see...something like "I dedicate this poem to Paulo, as he was the inspiration...the wind beneath my *ahem* wings!" (Too much?) *wink*

[Pól]

Oh yeah- got it. So ur asking is there someone who may inspire me to write a poem

[Pól]

I wonder who inspired my good friend John Mc to write "orgasm"- heehee

[KAOlmsted]

*laugh* Bet there is a lot of "self" in that one!

sillykimmer

[Pól]

Lol

[Neville]

Sorry Paulo, I forgot to add my rating

[Neville]

Paulo, nice work - I guess we can all empathise with this little wonder. all good Things, Neville

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I like in such a short piece, the message was creatively clear. Yes I did not understand the last two lines either, but as I red down on the reviews I got the grasp of it, and it does make the piece all the more. I too can relate on this piece and the mysteries of the viewer... It is a great write, and I love your choice of words. It's like an invite into your muse. Thank you for sharing.

[Pól]

thank you so much, K. you are too kind.

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

You are most welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The poem asked a question and open the door to thoughts. With the internet. Never know who will read your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pól]

Thank you Coyote. I read one of your pieces recently and enjoyed it immensely

[KAOlmsted]

Well. I see. I really do NOT critique poetry (as stated) but I wonder if this would sound better if you stuck to one pronoun to describe your secret reader..."never makes themself known" (themselves, btw) "or tells me what THEY feel" OR "never makes YOURself known or tells me what you feel" See? Otherwise, meh...not bad.

[Pól]

thank you-I wrote this in something of a hurry and agree that I need to revisit it. Please feel free to read my other poems, hopefully some of them may suit your taste better.