Donard

My feable attempt to reflect the beauty of a magical place, for my daughter, Megan, whom i love so much.

Rocky ragged mountain path 

carved from granite ridge

jutting like dragonteeth

twisting and turning

worming, nay ... snaking

from your ankles to your temple

a stairway to a seventh paradise

a highway to heaven.

 

Climbing, climbing

further and higher

'til cloud welcomed us in

to its solemn embrace

for a cup of tae

whilst hiding your finest china

from eager eyes,yearning

for the veil to lift.

 

A place of a thousand waterfalls

caressing your shoulders

cooling your brow

whilst soothing my pain

and cleansing my soul

as i swam in your fountain

of ice-cold bliss.

 © Paul O' Neill 2012

Reviews

[lisat]

Must visit soon

[lisat]

and this place, too.

[Circe]

goodness... truly a magical piece.. the heights of love, nature and reverence... beauty surrounds... I feel really touched by this.

[Pól]

tbh my words don't really do the place justice- but one can only do their best!!

[Circe]

your words are a perfect complement!

[Pól]

awww

[The Random Writings Of ..]

"a stairway to a seventh paradise
a highway to heaven"
These lines to me describe a place of beauty/hence the reference to heaven.
Although I am a bit confused because at the end you talk about pain, has your daughter passed? The climbing higher and higher to a solemn embrace, and a place of a thousand waterfalls, does sound magical, so beautiful, only one can imagine what place holds such beauty?
Again cleansing your your soul - powerful wording flowing into swimming in her fountain of ice cold bliss.
This is a beautiful write, and tender, filled with love. The only pain that reflects is in the last 3 lines, in which case I ask if you lost her. If I am off - please forgive me. If not I am so sorry.
I must say the images in this piece are vivid and I can picture them clearly. Very well written. Thank you for sharing.

[Pól]

Thankfully no. Those are references to the day- to-day worries & pains that trouble us, that can be soothed by visiting a place such as this. Your interpretion however was insightful & perfectly valid. Thank you so much.

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

I am glad I was off base on that one! Beautiful write! And you are most welcome :)

[Pól]

Indeed megan really wanted to join me in my improptu swim. I will put a pic of the two of us by this poem

[Pól]

This is utterly well spoken.
I read it twice, to understand
Your Irish tongue better :)
Just love it.

Nice ode.

E.L.

[Pól]

Go raidh maith milé agat

Is breá liom a fhoghlaim aon teanga, bheadh ​​Gaeilge ag mo ochtú

[Pól]

Na h'Ollainne atá chomh oilte le lanuage. Tá mé chomh tógtha sin.