scream (updated)

a re-written peice

 SCREAM

(new title: trapped words)

Well I’ve been racing words through my head

Just to stumble to a stutter of hellos

And I got a pain in my chest from the words I can't let go

Heartache, heart attack, my pulse races every time we walk home

These dreams won't leave; I know I need to speak these words

But that means I could lose you if I say them too

 

I stand screaming on this mountain

Why do I do this to myself?

Even if I don’t speak

Won't you listen to the silence?

To my movements, to me listening to you?

I know everyone else can tell

Can you?

 

It's turning into sorrow for I know you don’t feel the same

Starving my body of all feeling

As if I’m treading through water

Just to get close enough to you

When we’re apart I feel my heart slow down

It barely beats; I know that I have to say these words

For right now my heart beats

It only beats for you

 

I scream in my heart, my head and my soul

Words only a broken heart can understand

And deep in your eyes I see

You see the pain I’m going through

But you can't help me

No you can't help me

Because deep in your eyes I see

The only one feeling like this

Is  me.

Reviews

[Samantha]

ouch. Painful to read because of the obvious emotions in the words. Amazing writing though. I loved how you started it with 'Well'. Not many can do that and pull it off. Great job!

[PhantomDancer]

This is a very realistic depiction of what we all feel at some stage in our lives, and the aloneness that accompanies it. You write very well, and I look forward to reading more of your works!