Day & NIght

A poem dedicated to the creatures of day and night.

 

Night falls along the rivers bank

 

the moonlit water shivers in the wind

 

croaks fill the nights air

 

nocturnal creatures awaken from their deep slumbers

 

howls begin to rouse through the forests

 

waking the owls who begin their nights ascend in search of  prey

 

dawn slowly approaches

 

 the creatures of the night subside into their lulling sleeps

 

the sun rises through a tangle of clouds

 

creatures of the day awaken

 

butterflies are seen in patches of flowers

 

and deer graze in nearby fields

 

soon the sun will fall behind the mountains and night will fall once again

 

 bringing a new day to follow

 

Author's Note

What do you think about this poem?

Reviews

[Kathryn Star, Shine!]

I loved your colored words, as blue is night and yellow day. I liked how you told about how the "the moonlit water shivers in the wind" as can be seen by ripples. From night dawning to day, an interesting prospective. A lot of writers will write from day to night. I liked your wording as you described the many facades of each passing moment. Well written! =) ks.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I love this. Here, the night creatures are, bobcats, coyotes, owls, raccoons, opossums, skunks and rabbits...we have a great variety of nature, I like the contrast offered in the piece and the mirrored image. Well done.

[Voice]

I really like this poem especially the format you used; it's just beautiful making it look like the night turning into the rising sun great idea. Amazing piece you have here�

Voice

[Leah]

The imagery within the poem is wonderful, and the imagery you provided with the color scheme was beneficial too. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of art

[Wicahpi]

So much to see in the mountains, day and night.
Reminds me of being at camp with my grandma.
I loved watching the wildlife come out at night, especially.
Nicely done.

[NyGL]

Very good imagery, especially on the night part! Liked how you made the night part blue and the day part yellow.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

I think it was very simple, yet very vivid. Imagery does magic on short poems like these! This was a great description of day and night... although I have no hesitation in saying that I absolutely loved the night part!

"The moonlit water shivers in the wind" --that's my favorite line!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Anita B Jacques]

I liked the first half best. The second half was less interesting, you are rushing through it, words filling, Try to keep your poems on a single subject, like one for the night, the other the day. Word filling is a problem that you have to work on. Thank you for sharing. God bless. Keep writing, read you poem over and over, make corrections over and over, eliminate and leave out unnecessary words, keep it simple.

[gomjordan23]

The word "animals" stands out too much, feels forced in there. Try creatures or something instead, otherwise I really like it.

[uber-bubble]

love the fluency of this piece, and the imagery is beautiful aswell. fantastic work

[enuf]

I really like this peom I liked how you managed to expicitly express how things were almost if i was there nicely written well done. xx. I have written on called Day after Day have a read of it let me know what you think