BadDrunkPoetry

How I feel when I read poetry I just don't get

I drunk in the poetry

Like a bottle of cheap styled beer

One verse after another

The writer trying too hard

Made no point or sense

Finally, I stood up (too fast mind you)

In frustration, stumbling across the floor

Then it hit me! The blunt edge of the door

Stopping for a minute to think

No meaning or “Aha” moment came

Seemingly it went, escaped before…

I could make it to the bathroom

Author's Note

These are metaphor. I haven't drank alcohol in over 16 years when I realized how much better life is with out it.

Reviews

[Beccy]

I am forever scribbling little notes and lines in a notebook I carry with me everywhere. Sometimes the poem just flows, other times it has to be wrested from the mind each word at a time. Those other time poems are often the ones I re-write or discard, perhaps temporarily, perhaps for always. Either way, I generally try to avoid being enigmatic just for the sake of it. It is difficult enough to get the gist of a poem, without having to figure out the myriad, and often unnecessary twists and turns that the writer has included. Such pointless convolution simply turns what should be an enjoyable few moments into a puzzle not worth trying to unravel.

Beccy.

[Michael G. Smith]

I here ya sister, all you say is true.

[Beccy]

It's interesting to try and understand the meaning of a poem, and interpretation is always part of the enjoyment for me. You are right though, sometimes a write seems just too convoluted to bother, and unnecessarily so in many cases.

Beccy.

[Michael G. Smith]

You hit the proverbial nail on the head. I go back and read some of my ealier stuff and say "wow, this is crap!" I'm glad I'm humble enough to realize this but also understand it was a stepping stone lesson into the realm of better writing. Beccy thank you so much for your insight.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i hardly drink either...poetry yes, beer no.

and trying to make it the bathroom before the "aha" moment...
don't always make it...and sometimes it gets frustrating when we get a buzz from poetry that really is just like spilled beer, and sounds like it comes from the barely sitting up drunk at the bar.

[Michael G. Smith]

Yes, my hope as that it is their beginning journey to write better. I'll admit when I first started my poetry was awful.

[Matching Socks]

Yikes! Please don't tell me I'm in this bucket. Lie if you have to, I'm good with that. :)
This made me chuckle.

[Rita L. Sev]

And a great metaphor this is, Mike! I think we have all imbibed in a poem, perhaps one too strong for our own sensibilities, and it just make our heads spin! Maybe this is why I pour short shots... They're a bit easier to swallow. ;)

[tyson]

you haven't had a drink in 16 years! congrats! Brilliant piece, too

[Michael G. Smith]

I appreciate your comment Tyson. I never was an alcoholic just a social drinker but I started thinking why do I feel the need to alter myself with a little buzz because each time I do I may be missing out on something more real. Meaning, I lost touch with the spirit me, the real me, the first me, when I altered my state.

[tyson]

Oh man, those words hit very close to home. I was a bit more than a social everything and have only just begun to realise this. Sobriety ain't so bad

[Saddam]

Beautiful poetry.... Nice to read you dwar.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you very much.

[Mikayla_Stagg]

I like this (: Well written

[Trace]

I get what you are trying to convey
But I kind of feel what your poem is trying to say.


Your first line might use: drink or drank in place of drunk.

Trace

[Michael G. Smith]

Drunk is the feeling that I needed to portray inebriation by something we cannot understand.

[Trace]

Just a thought: " I drunk " might be: I'm drunk" then, to have it more cohesive.

[Michael G. Smith]

be then i lose the sense of action as the poetry is the beer I'm reading/drinking.

[Trace]

I tuought it might be the alcohol doing the talking .

It all makes sense now

[Kelly Scheppers]

I've gotta "feel" something inside of me when I read a poem...I just think it makes for a better review. Like you said, an "aha moment"!

Good stuff, Michael...much enjoyed!

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Kelly. stop on by any old time.