Watching Rain In Song

Missing the one I love

Buckets of silver bullets

They hit the lawn

And I sit and watch, the rain

And I think in song

Wondering why

You’re not here

By my side

And crying seems

So freaking useless

Cuz there’s enough rain

That falls into this life

And the music is

And it isn’t helping

Saying everything

Through the Bluetooth

Pulsing and pounding

Beating, meaning upon my heart

And the rain starts racing, trying...

To beat the pain to a pulp

No! It’s not okay!

You shouldn’t be...

An empty space faceless!

But, So you are

And the river flows

Streams of dreams

On the computer screen, before me

Pictures of you

Days ago,

Before you left me

And I sit watch...

The rain within killing me

And I think

What did I do to deserve this?

 

Reviews

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Wow, this is heavy. I, too, have lost myself in music while trapped in a miserable state where I felt useless, unloved, and abandoned. The words you use are both abstract and close to reality. You go from abstractly speaking of rain and tears as if they are one in the same, to describing the music that is real. Beautiful poem. :)

[Michael G. Smith]

I believe we are kindred spirits in this sense. I work out of town each week and wrote this because my wife had to back home to another country for awhile and I was missing her immensely. The weekends are always our time.I'm grateful for poetry because it's so therapeutic.

[Cassie]

Sad piece, loneliness is a really bad feeling

[Michael G. Smith]

I know. I'm just getting home from a week away to an empty home because my left to New York to see our daughter and granddaughter and when she gets back I'll been gone again. I'm so grateful for our strong love.

[Cassie]

Thank God, that is a blessing from God, treasure it

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

The emotion really hit me in this...theres a lot of power in these words especially when you can tell they come from the heart. It touched me in a way I can't really explain...so good job at that

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, the heart grow fonder in a loved once absence.

[s y e]

Awk Mikey, this is bitter-sweet and so sad, I want to cry. :( This is full of heartache and pain. It really touched my heart.

I hope all is well now.

[Michael G. Smith]

You and You also with your lose. I like the new profile pic. But, remember "Cryin' seems so freakin' useless", lol. Sometimes I feel like a misfit when I enjoy the painful feeling of holding back the crying. B good Nudel Head.

[Beccy]

Sometimes it seems the rainfall will never end. But of course it does, and with it comes the new blooming of the rose.

Very much enjoyed. Beccy.

[Michael G. Smith]

So true Beccy. I just hope we have what it takes to recognize it.

[Pryde Foltz]

Pulsing and pounding
Beating, meaning upon my heart
And the rain starts racing, trying...
To beat the pain to a pulp

You know you are onto something. Loved this write.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, love to be influenced by music and nature, so both at once is a treat.

[Nyu]

Even though it hold the sad theme what I liked was the changes in mood like for example when you shifted from "An empty space faceless!" to "But, So you are" everything just layers and layers and makes a a picture that isn't clear its dreamy, blurry as if someone had rain in their eyes.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Michael, this is a very honest, powerful poem. I like how you mixed in the effect of the musical lylrics adding salt to the wounds. It is so true. Losing someone in a relationship is so hard, and listening to music on the radio doesn't often help very much at all. A great write. Thank you for sharing it with us....:)

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, I kind of twisted it for more dramatic effect. My wife didn't leave me per say but I hadn't heard from her in days because she is in a small town in a third world country. You know how it is sometimes when you haven't written in a while you feel like you just have to write something. I thoroughly enjoy every time you stop by to comment. Please, check out my prologue to my novelette "The Mirror". I am in editing stages but just posted the first of it. Thanks again.

[Bright Ocean Star]

You're always welcome. :)

[Avinash]

Its a beautiful rain but in your case it is adding to pain and that makes it even more special.

[Michael G. Smith]

Bitter sweet my friend. You are always a welcome to my page. Please, check out my first post of "The Mirror" which is in final edit.