And Still Love Hurts

I stare off...

Past the night

Stir the universe...

With thoughts sublime 

Take back that...

Which I've cursed

And still... 

Love hurts

Author's Note

Inspired from poetry by Augustus

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Bittersweet loveliness. Lydi**

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you Lydia. I'm sure this is something unfortunately we can relate too.

[Cassie]

yes love hurts so bad at times. This is good. I enjoyed

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, I had been wondering where you were. I checked your page the other day and saw nothing newer posted. Hoping things are going well.

[Cassie]

Hi Mike, I am well, been up and down with some wedding plans amhaving this june so I have not been able to post or read RRs so I had to close RRs for a bit then after all this I will be able to read. Otherwise I have posted something new, check it

[sharonlee]

How poignant and rich these few lines are... thank you for sharing.

[Michael G. Smith]

Your welcome. Glad we can share together.

[sharonlee]

As am I. Such interaction can be inspiring.

[rutherford]

Opening three lines pull the reader in. stare off past the night/Stir the universe/With eyes and mind. Wonderful relationship in second half with god. immense range in a small space.

Small technical point--the first mention is "a god" but second mention is capitalized as "He". Do you want to make first mention simply "God"?

[Michael G. Smith]

Great observation. I was trying to hint to ourselves or myself as part of deity and how our relationship is parallel but as I went back reread it I can see it can cause a confusion. So I will rely on the reads own intelligence as I change he to lower case "H".

[Michael G. Smith]

I want to say thank you because I believe that is what this site should be about. Helping others to become better writers by pointing out these things and not just hollow praises I find among comments way too often.

[Rita L. Sev]

So true - love hurts, but lack of love destroys... A profound piece, Mike.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Rita, doesn't always come down to love?

[Pryde Foltz]

I stare off past the night
Stir the universe
With eyes and mind
Take back which curse
Undo metronomic rhymes

Hope and love spring eternal.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks for stopping by Pryde. I'll let you in on a little secret. I was reading one of Augustus's poems and my mind read the line "My mind stirs the universe" in a poem of his I was reading even though the line wasn't actually there. My mind occasionally reads ahead of it self, but I knew there was a poem in that line and Wah-la!

[Pryde Foltz]

Serendipity can work that way.

[A. Amos]

last lines were amazing, great work my friend...

[Michael G. Smith]

Amos, thanks I always enjoy your visits.

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a beautiful and stirring write. I really enjoyed the last couple lines especially. Oh, how true to say that it could be worse. Hold on tight to God! (:

[Michael G. Smith]

I'm really thrilled that you are enjoying my poetry. I believe my writers block is waning.

[melissa]

Awesome poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

[Michael G. Smith]

The curse is I can't stop them.