Love Poem No.9

Hoping someone will love you back

She loves me, she loves me not
Drifting, gone... one by one
I pluck away my myriad thoughts
Heart strings play, "scarlet" a song skyward loft

 

Are petals, a rose forever lost
So gentle up into minstral wind
Or a prisoner of love escaping off
Thus, once, twice, thrice again

 

How shall I ever know…?
The person which thou are?
Amid this whirlwind of to and fro
In continu'd passions from afar

 

Quell my heart from its bitter swell
And allow true assurances to begin
Appease the I without September in soft petals fall
Turn us around come forever; springtime, with warm wayward winds

 

Alas, upon their return, shall doubts amend
To this man of fire yearning
Evermore than merely friends
To accentuate wildflower, love in life and blooming

Reviews

[Kiba Shadowpaw]

I know my post is a bit late, but this was a very well written piece. Kudos to hopeless romantics ^^

[Matching Socks]

Thus was very nicely done, you've a romantic heart my friend. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

A true love poem, complete with beautiful imagery, a dash of metaphor, and plenty of feeling. Bravo, Mike!

[A.M. Al-Ali]

this is what should be called poetry.

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

I really fell in love with this one while reading so beautiful and unique. I loved the beginning: "She loves me, she loves me not, Drifting gone one by one" Really neat and smart to start it out that way. Romantic and a joy to read filled with a lot of love.

[Michael G. Smith]

Love inspires all. I have my wife to thank this. I started writing poetry to release the demons from my mother's suicide and dad's death from cancer the following year when I was a kid. They have been dispelled and now love seems to be my more dominate theme.

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

Oh I'm sorry to hear that. It sounds like you have been through a lot. It's cool that you can put all that emotion and feeling into your poems. You seem like a very nice and strong person, God bless :D

[just Penny]

I laughed at the title as it reminded me of a song. Again I like the style. Wondering about the 3rd stanza second line though and think maybe the generous poetic elastic hath endured its final stretch afore the snap, but I see that you used "are" instead of "art" to rhyme with "afar". Friends from lovers rarely succeeds. I know I cannot. Nice writing. Penny

[Michael G. Smith]

Yeah, It was tough call but didn't want to the route of afart to get the rhyme,lol.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Very beautiful and romantic.


Are petals, a rose forever lost
So gentle up into minstral wind
Or a prisoner of love escaping off
Thus, once, twice, thrice again


thank you for your kind review and
comments you left on my page and your aspiring
words.


Blessings. Benita / kindred poet

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you fellow poet sister.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're welcome. I enjoyed this read was a pleasure to read. Blessings. Benita / kindred poet

[Emerald Seas]

Each of us have been here, once or twice, where we hope another loves us as much as we do them. Hoping it works out - sometimes it does, sometimes it isn't meant to...
I like the hopefulness in this poem. It is heartfelt, romantic, and passionate without being overdone. A solid write!

[Michael G. Smith]

Yeah, it worked out. She loves and puts up with me.

[Emerald Seas]

Haha - sounds like a married man -for sure!