Mother

Feeling the love of mother

Mother you are sun
Love is warmth
And I am earth

 

Days that pass
Your light my path
Humble and hearth

 

Essential to His plan
You are heaven's crossroads
The whole, of family's universe

 

Mother you are sun
Love is warmth
And I am Earth

Reviews

[Great Aunt Astri]

This is interesting. Often the sun is supposed to be male and the moon, female, in our culture. It is the other way round in some other countries. But as your poem says it is nice to think of our mothers as being warm ...even 'Essential to His plan, You are heaven's crossroads, The whole, of family's universe.' Well written.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you for your kind words. Please, any time you may think of a way to improve my work feel free to make suggestions.

[Blue]

Beautiful metaphors that give justice to a mother's love. I love the beauty of the simplicity of your style.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Arzel. I've come to understand the importance of mmothers in God's plan since losing mine so young.

[Cassie]

Reminds me of my mother. I loved this one too.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you Cassie.

[MikeV]

It sounds like you have a wonderful love for your mother
well written, my friend :)

[s y e]

This is lovely, this is beautifully written, Mike - I loved it! :-)

[Michael G. Smith]

thanks Noodlehead, now put that cigarette down so can write many more poems, lol.

[Frieda P]

Like your celestial musings here, mothers fit so many descriptions, this would one of the shiniest I've read, I'm giving this one to my own son to read, simply lovely.

[Michael G. Smith]

That's awesome, make sure to let him know that it's written by one of the premier poets of our age.

[Pryde Foltz]

Lovely and loving write. Thank you, Mike.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Pryce. Finally someone called me Mike, lol.

[rutherford]

Beautifully expressed. Your analogy of planets works well with parents. A wonderful phrase, "heaven's crossroads."

[Michael G. Smith]

I borrowed that from a talk by an LDS seventy.

[Michael G. Smith]

I sent you another bird poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

Mother as sun - giver of life and warmth, without whom we would die... but too close, too much, can burn... Great analogy here, Mike!

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Rita and I'm the earth because I'm grounded.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I love how you likened your mother to the image of the sun; it's a good and effective metaphor. Also the repetition of the first stanza creates an ending which wraps up the rest. The capitalized letter 'E' on Earth (last line) speaks of identity, of importance, of intimacy with the sun. Well-penned. :x

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, but not only the image but the whole celestial body that not only gives warmth but life and nourishment.

[Stacey Watts]

The love of a mother is very powerful and deep. This was very well written. A true beauty and tribute to those women who possess a strong love for their children.