I have lost this battle

This was a battle i knew i would never win

I wont shed a tear and you wont see me fall

I'll land on my feet and thrive on this set back 

My heart is torn apart and theres no sewing it up

Why i thought i could do this was beyond my sight

My eyes and mind were flooded with a heavy fog of Lust

The nights we talked and the days we said I love you's 

Fake as can be and lies that were pined on my sleeve

The signs were there but the rain of heavy wanting and yearning hid them. 

The waters were too deep for crossing over 

Raging jealousy running through me 

here is my sword,

 thrown to the ground of all those who have tried and been defeated

My breath was taken from me the moment you spoke, 

Put in a jar and never given back

My green grass grows brown, the pillows soak up my unwanted love tears

The old heart cant breath and the blood stops flowing

today i was told by my conscious that it was different and to move on.

It's whats best for me at this time.. for i have lost this battle of love once and for all

Reviews

[Muhammad]

"Today I was told by my conscious that it was different and to move on."

This is my favorite line. Our inner conscious, God, whatever you want to call it, always knows what's best for us. You may have lost this battle, but I believe you have won the war.

[JC]

Strong poem of loss told with epic flow

[Carla]

Your a amazing writer. I love this!!

[soulsucker44]

awwww i loved it it was amazing

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

I read whole writing and like whole wording!
Really lovely writing!
Keep it up!
Do you read mine to Anguish and Manner
God bless you!
Lucky!

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the lost and resentment ..resounding pain..emotive to the core..well done

[blushwine]

I thought the rhythm could have flowed a little better, but the sentiment and word usage was great. The emotion was really expressed.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Great sentimental lines all for Love everlasting Love Nice flow folk...

[C.N.Moore]

This is an emotion I think we're all too familiar with - but being able to put pen to pad in this time of need is so crucial - and I am happy to see you were able to do so. I'm so very sorry for the last battle but remember it is only one of many and we cannot lose them all ;) A fabulous portrayal of pain and determination to move on - great job.

[Mauricio Montoya]

very strong with feeling, great job.