Ill fated

Ill fated minds 

dart and dabble

in and out

around and between 

up and down

Ill fated hearts

tear and sew

cut and mend

twist and turn

Ill fated hands 

press and hold 

kill and heal 

grab and shove

Ill fated lips 

lies and truth 

words and actions

tingle and shiver

Ill fated thoughts

succumb and pass

torture and please

ponder and fantasize

  

Author's Note

i kind of left this poem open. im sure there is more to it that i can add. im just really tired. tell me what you think

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

Tempting stuff thrown on the
pile of human degradation.
Open ended, leaving readers
an escape hatch.
Life may be what we make it, or not.
Interesting, provacative, experimental.
Good stuff.
------ Eagle Cruagh

[NightShade]

This is a wondrously provocative piece and I think it quite fine, that you left it open. It leaves the reader doing a bit of mental gymnastics.

[Adam M. Snow]

Wonderful. I'm truly in awe of this work of art. Good job

[Tate Morgan]

Ive had a few ill fated encounters I have no trouble remembering them they are intense though they burn out early

[My Fair Lady]

This is a good write.. I like how it weaves its way along.. it's human.. and the open end.. well that's human too.. room for growth and change.. but so often stuck in the same ill fated path.. I like this.

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

"Ill fated hearts
tear and sew
cut and mend
twist and turn",

this stanza was best in my opinion. This poem was outstanding. I really enjoyed reading it. Amazing write.

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I like the repetition - lends the poem strength ..good write

[Vanessa Rico]

Love the repetition! Beautiful words!

[KAREN]

Excellent read and write!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very deep and powerful!