Satan had her soul

she woke up cold

Never knowing what happened

her clothes torn and scattered

Clutching to her own body

blood trickling from herself down the bedding

pain ripping through her body

tugging at her every being

 

What was that? The shadow

in the corner of the dark room

The thing that stayed so still

Was it human?  some one to save her?

 

Holding her soul  out in his hand to show her

he smiled leaving a villanish smirk

His eyes glistened with evil as she cried

Had taken everything she had ever known

Satan had come to her room that night

forever making her every move a step in fear!!

 

Satan had been here this night!

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

heartrending with so many shattering nuances and undercurrents moving through the surface of the poem~excellent~

[EqualRhyme]

dang, very creepy and a fun read. keep it up.

[sarah]

this was really scary! but really good!!

[Wondering Mind]

Scary

[Cassiopia Summers]

Very powerful and tantilizing. Great write.

[justice]

scary! This is a very powerful piece because it tantilzes the emotion of the reader. The aura of mystery is perfectly intertwined. I really loved this write. It is very well done and a fun ride for the reader. You have captured a feeling (fear) and really played with it. It seems to be in the context of a rape... :( very sad. Wonderfully written though.

One point I would say is I think you have misspelled a word. L5 I believe that you meant "bedding" instead of "beding". :) Thanks for sharing this with me.
J

[HopelesslyDevoted]

awesome job! this totally scared me! it kind of made me think of nightmare on elm street.

[silver threaded queen]

I like the longer version. Great job!

[Morgan]

well written!