I'm Just A Doll

I watch every day as she prances around 

Around that big room in that pretty yellow dress

A dress her father had gotten her from England 

England is a very far away place 

Shes got something new today

Today her father brought her something 

Something is in that box on the bed. 

I sit on the ledge of her window 

Seeing her slowly pull something out of the box

she looks over at me then back at the box

Slowly and cautiously she pulls it out...

A doll? Another doll?

She has one I'm right over here!!

HELLO!!

i never get touched any more

no more secrets given to me to hold

I sit here hoping she holds me again

whispers in my ear all her darkest secrets.

I am a lost soul

I have to find my way 

In a world where there are many of us lost

Lost and trying to be found.

Reviews

[Hollow Man]

you, love, have made so much progress as a writer since we've become friends. you should be proud of yourself. this is a great poem. there's one thing ya need to work on to take your writing to the next level and that is punctuation and grammar. If you can nail that along with the stories and emotion you tell, my god, nothing can stop you.

KGS

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

first i love the picture ad the emotion of this piece. i can so see how hurt that doll was nice job.
`sk

[just is]

first off i adore that pic, secondly this is so sad and tugging. The emotions are so haunting. I like the read.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

aw, this is so sad. reminds me when i was little, thats how i used to think about my dolls. i seriously used to be very careful not to hurt their feelings. lol
but you made a very true and good point when this poem. i like it :)

[Nobody.]

I agree whole-heartedly with Hollow Man. You're getting better everytime you write something new! This is brilliant. Keep it up.

On a strange side note: THAT is the creepiest picture I've seen in a LONG time. lol! Dolls creep me out.

[Wondering Mind]

clever idea for using the doll to convey the sadness and dismay

[Morgan]

Very Well Done!

[My Fair Lady]

You have done well here giving life and even sadness in the fear of rejection to a childhood toy. An almost desperate plea from a very quiet soul.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

It`s very nice concept, specially the final lines...I like it, we are lost and trying to be found...Doll-poems I really like :)

[.]

that's a novel idea..I did'nt see that coming..well constructed, wish you have elaborated on the idea even more..like Toy Story :)