I'm Just A Doll

I watch every day as she prances around 

Around that big room in that pretty yellow dress

A dress her father had gotten her from England 

England is a very far away place 

Shes got something new today

Today her father brought her something 

Something is in that box on the bed. 

I sit on the ledge of her window 

Seeing her slowly pull something out of the box

she looks over at me then back at the box

Slowly and cautiously she pulls it out...

A doll? Another doll?

She has one I'm right over here!!

HELLO!!

i never get touched any more

no more secrets given to me to hold

I sit here hoping she holds me again

whispers in my ear all her darkest secrets.

I am a lost soul

I have to find my way 

In a world where there are many of us lost

Lost and trying to be found.

Reviews

[Hollow Man]

you, love, have made so much progress as a writer since we've become friends. you should be proud of yourself. this is a great poem. there's one thing ya need to work on to take your writing to the next level and that is punctuation and grammar. If you can nail that along with the stories and emotion you tell, my god, nothing can stop you.

KGS

[Cassiopia Summers]

Very simple explanation, yet the story comes to life behind your eyes. Great write. :)

[YouoweYoupay]

I loved this poem, because I used to catch glimpses of life in the azure eyes of my snow-maiden, scented dolls. You've described this story so simply and it was touching. Keep writing!

[Graceful]

oh my gosh! i'm running to my doll now!

[MuSe Ampoule]

oh, so very sweet and sad. The perspective of a replaced doll/toy. Very good!

[Ruth]

This is so desperately emotive! I love it!
Such powerful wording around a contusion of emotion!
xx

[nono]

This is really cool, beautiful! That picture is a little scary, but this poem is amazing. I love how you did this. Sometimes when I space off I just think and forget everything else. Kinda like I'm not even here...Nice job! A fantastic write!

[Weasley]

Good job!!!

[Dark Empress]

Nice one !

[Shawn Killian]

I really like it. I like how you're able to put a lot of detail into poetry without making it boring or too long. I can't seem to grasp that concept s i respect anyone else who can do it.

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job!