the outside world

at my In laws and was going through everything i was seeing from the dinning room.. i hope you like it

The soft rolling hills

seen from the window

Wind blown trees

cars parked

houses in silence

Sun peers his head out

into the chilly air

not sure if he wants to come out

Mist rolls in slightly, treading carefully

 

birds sing their morning song

chattering heard in their songs from the trees

as its so cold and not yet warm the are

Horses let out of barnes into fields of dreams

Clocks singing their lovely tune every hour

dark is the house but light is the outside world

 

Looking out from the dinning room table

Watching the sleet come down, trying to turn to snow

dark grey clouds cover the sky..

 

So it has happened....

The first snow has fallen...

 

 

 

Reviews

[Cassiopia Summers]

Good descriptions, and an okay flow. Decent write. :)

[SilentDreamer]

I liked how you slowly led up to the main point, and it was very descriptive giving you a good thought out mental image of what's going on and what the scene looks like. I really love the ending. It's just kind of thoughtful and meaningful and soft. Very well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the description. Your words made the vision of the cold day appear. The flow and the story was very good. I like the ending. I see too many first snow days in my life. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job.

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what a delightful view you have here...

[Graceful]

awww. very good. tell your in-laws i said hi!

[MuSe Ampoule]

Great job...very descriptive.

[JanieB]

This is sweet.

[Wondering Mind]

even the most ordinary of things inspire. You did well with this.

[My Fair Lady]

I always enjoy your observation, especially of early morning. There are a couple of spelling things you may want to look at, but I enjoyed the observation so much none-the-less.