DONE!

I am done!

The lies stop here

Walk away now!

Don't open your mouth

You can't touch my heart!

razors slice you open

The memories float away!

down the rough and rocky river

I am numb!

feeling Nothing

Walking this place dazed!

a fog over me leading me away

Turning my back on you

i can do better

Flee from here!

don't turn back

I have the world in my hands!

you have nothing but sand

Slipping away you are gone

pressing on i am strong

I am done!

heres the gun

for i have won

Reviews

[Rory CJ Frankson]

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Holy... I rather like this one you! The imagery is brutally cool and cuts to the bone [ I have the world in my hands! --- you have nothing but sand ], this is a very cool line. In the turn around.

I love the ending...

I am done!
heres the gun!!!!

Well the review is done, an you got the gun... please, just don't shoot me.

****************************************************************Flee from here! Ro run.*********
Write On / Right On! Romon in Review ... Slipping away, I'm done ...

[Mauricio Montoya]

well done.

[My Fair Lady]

Oooo... when you are done.. you really mean it.

[Nothing Personal]

I am done Here's the gun. WOW. What a phrase !! Its on " I wont take it anymore, I've had enough of this crap". I liked the idea and the lines" I have the world in my hands , you have nothing but sand" - Shows an image of the speaker with superior power and a hapless person on the other end trying to grab on but everything slips away as its sand. Good one !!

[Dark Empress]

I like this, it's received as very powerful. I love the ending.

[Hollow Man]

'I am done! heres the gun' powerful, so powerful. mountains made of sand fall into the sea eventually. he has nothing but sand, perhaps he was nothing but sand

KGS

[Sugar Plum ♥]

It`s so strong words and powerful writing, I like it!
I have the world in my hands!
You have nothing but sand

[Graceful]

very well done. u write extreamly well!

[Aven]

a clear statement and a powerful voice. :)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is amazing... i'm not sure how to describe how much i enjoyed reading this. it struck a nerve i must say. very honest which makes it all the more intense. i love intense poetry. i love the ending as well! painfully honest! great job!

[MuSe Ampoule]

Very powerful and raw!
"I have the world in my hands!
you have nothing but sand" Great lines!