Lined Up

Lined in a row on the coffee table

Some full, some half gone 

Some are all gone

She moans and groans

laying on the couch unable to move

She slurs and stumbles her words

throwing the bottles around

The little girl and boy stand there

hiding behind a corner

having to watch again as their mother

can't take care of them

She takes another drink

and another

by noon shes done...

Lays limp on the couch, eyes closed 

Out the door they go, to play alone

torn dirty stained clothes......

Reviews

[LadyRae]

So sad, yet holds a lot of truth to the matter. I remember watching my own mother drink her life away. It was heart breaking.

[MuSe Ampoule]

Great poem, terrible story. Sad fact of reality though, wonderfully illustrated.

[Tate Morgan]

So sad but true seems alcohol is worse to quit than heroin

[Marty]

this is so very sad!

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

Ohh wow this made me realize how bad some peoples addiction is and it does not hurt just the person drinking but others as well.. nice write..

~SK

[Nothing Personal]

Great take on alcoholism and what effect it could have on your children. This is something all parents should look into. Like your range in poems..

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Oh, thats amazing, reminds me of one very sad movie about alcocholic girl...
and the end is really so effective...

[Red]

This is so sad. I'm an alcoholic and I go to AA, and I listen to these mothers, all such beautiful people, wallowing in shame and agony for what they've done. And I am friends with their sons and daughters, alcoholics too. They forgive so willingly. But to think of it all at they very beginning just breaks my heart. Clearly this evokes a lot of emotion in me, so I'd say you did your job in that department. I do recommend a touch more of rhyme and rhythm just to keep things fluid, but otherwise, I love it.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

yes, very sad. i know of and have heard of too many true stories about this kind of thing. nice poem though.

[Wondering Mind]

I guess I'll have to go and look at a flower for 15 minutes now. Sad again