A Dark Hell

Skin and bones

No food for days

Wobbly legs cant stand

Sitting in the dark

The door closed

Clothes hide her

Broken jaw

Bruises line the fragile 

Hair matted 

Afraid of the light

Dizziness falls over her

Gripping around her 

She leans to the side

Who knows how much longer

The air is leaving

Inhaling  with her might

One last deep breath

Her energy slipping

Pressing her eyes closed 

Hoping to be found

Wishing this night mare would end

Weakness fills her 

Slipping she is

No longer able

Her lids close

Lightly over her balls 

Darkness surrounds and engulfs

Her eyes flutter

Slowly opening again

A shadow stands 

Holding out a hand.....

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

wow this is intriuging... this is one of those poems that could be interpreted in many ways. there are so many things that could have happened to lead up to her current situation, and i like how you left that part for the reader to imagine. thats one of things i need to work on, letting the reader take the story where they imagine instead of giving them every little detail! excellent poem in general!

[Mauricio Montoya]

I don’t think we can blame god, were all given a task in life in where we find a solution. If we don’t then it’s repeated. Excellent write.

[Toon]

i don't know know whether it made me believe in god or not. good poem.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

I dont know where this came from but i just started to write and this is what came out

[Wondering Mind]

very sad write

[Aven]

sometimes the question is justified "where is god?"

[Nothing Personal]

Just beautiful. I am surprised to find that i am your first reviewer. Brilliant poem on hunger and starvation and onto those millions out there who are suffering the same. Ideas like this require special attention. I am really deeply touched by your poem. The way you build up the different stages is perfect. Well chosen lines, and i love the end !! Too good, keep writing stuff as good as this. I will be following your work of course !!

[Dark Empress]

That's incredibly sad. Wonderfully written.

[MuSe Ampoule]

What a sad and poignant poem! Very well written. It definitely made me feel for the girl.
"Weakness fills her
Slipping she is
No longer able" a thought left unfinished...like the girl. Brilliant stanza.