A Dark Hell

Skin and bones

No food for days

Wobbly legs cant stand

Sitting in the dark

The door closed

Clothes hide her

Broken jaw

Bruises line the fragile 

Hair matted 

Afraid of the light

Dizziness falls over her

Gripping around her 

She leans to the side

Who knows how much longer

The air is leaving

Inhaling  with her might

One last deep breath

Her energy slipping

Pressing her eyes closed 

Hoping to be found

Wishing this night mare would end

Weakness fills her 

Slipping she is

No longer able

Her lids close

Lightly over her balls 

Darkness surrounds and engulfs

Her eyes flutter

Slowly opening again

A shadow stands 

Holding out a hand.....

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

wow this is intriuging... this is one of those poems that could be interpreted in many ways. there are so many things that could have happened to lead up to her current situation, and i like how you left that part for the reader to imagine. thats one of things i need to work on, letting the reader take the story where they imagine instead of giving them every little detail! excellent poem in general!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem. The description of fear and desire to stay hidden away create a scary and a tale of mystery. The ending was very good. Left the reader with a open ending. What did she fear? A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sugar Plum ♥]

Very vivid, It reminds me of one portrait of sitting desperate woman from Van Gogh...even it`s slightly different

[Marty]

i so agree with nothing personal! this is one of your best!;)

[TAO]

Well done, well done. We are definitely applauding this piece.

[whiterabbit]

Wow, I feel claustrophobic just reading this. Well done, beautiful.

[Michael X]

I blieve God has a special place for these victims of atrocity and God has a place for those who do evil, amazing poem, i can't image

[.]

well..a story unfolds and it's a happy ending...at last!..clever and intriguing..

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

Just a beautiful write. this had a great feeling to it. the pain and emotion seemed to shoot out at me. It was really good. i could see the pin that the person was going through i simply loved it.. nice..

`sk

[Wolfwind Words]

The visual and emotional strength to this was perfect. It pulled the reader into the moment that the individual existed in. The feelings pulsed and the mind could understand the plight.
Two things... "Inhale" one word.
and you don't need a comma before the word "and"

I loved how in the end there was a shadowy hand reaching for her. It makes us wonder if that was the hand of god, the abuser or a savior.

Great Ink!
Wolfie