A Dark Hell

Skin and bones

No food for days

Wobbly legs cant stand

Sitting in the dark

The door closed

Clothes hide her

Broken jaw

Bruises line the fragile 

Hair matted 

Afraid of the light

Dizziness falls over her

Gripping around her 

She leans to the side

Who knows how much longer

The air is leaving

Inhaling  with her might

One last deep breath

Her energy slipping

Pressing her eyes closed 

Hoping to be found

Wishing this night mare would end

Weakness fills her 

Slipping she is

No longer able

Her lids close

Lightly over her balls 

Darkness surrounds and engulfs

Her eyes flutter

Slowly opening again

A shadow stands 

Holding out a hand.....

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

wow this is intriuging... this is one of those poems that could be interpreted in many ways. there are so many things that could have happened to lead up to her current situation, and i like how you left that part for the reader to imagine. thats one of things i need to work on, letting the reader take the story where they imagine instead of giving them every little detail! excellent poem in general!

[Cassiopia Summers]

The ending is amazing. Great, hopeful, conclusion, to the lifeless beginning and middle. Great work.

[Kathy]

Wow. This was sad at first, but happy in the end. It's good someone held out a hand, whether it was before she could die or after she did die, at least she was given a place to be loved and taken care of, potentially. (: Great job. Bravo!

[JanieB]

Oh how terribly sad. Well written.

[Morgan]

this is very cute! i quite enjoy it! its very intrigiuging! dark, mysterious, and very amazing!!

[Anna]

Intresting.Sad.Overall good.

[cassandra violet]

The ending was unexpected and added to how great this poem already was. You captured strong emotions here!

[sarah]

this deffently leaves you wanting more really sad!

[KAREN]

This poem leaves you wondering and thinking, something that is good for the readers, try to fill in the blanks, I like that!!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very well written!! sort of like a suspence poem! you wonder what's going to happen next! loved it!

[Color of the Iris]

This is a very beautiful poem, and I enjoyed it very much! Keep writing!