He's come home

He's come home

A Poem by Misty Blue Eyes

She stands at her window looking out
The birds singing beside her
closes her eyes at thoughts of him
His rough, strong hands all over her body
She has waited years for his return

Holding the letter
written in his hand
covered with tears

The day is bright and colorful
Warm air dances around her
moving her long flowing brown curly hair

Whispers in her ear sweet nothings 
His voice lingers telling her he's close
Her heart jumps at the thought of seeing him

Her hands shaky at memories of his body on top of hers 
late hours of the night they spent together
Early morning frolics in the garden beds

A carriage appears!
turning ever so slowly 
She runs down the long corridor of stairs
his face would soon be in her hands

She rushes to the door swinging it open
Her heart is about to burst

The carriage! It's empty with the living!
She cries out 
her love has come home for all the wrong reasons......

© 2010 Misty Blue Eyes


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oh my god.... i'm not even sure what to say... its a great poem... but its so incredibly sad. great use of suspense though and i again, i love how you always save the most important details of the story till the end. nice writing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Heart breaking ending, If you wanted a real solid POP. Something to smack them in the face, keep the same voice in the last stanza, build up to the casket don't jump it right out.

BUT that being said, I love the piece, it's well crafted masterfully executed. You left me breatheless. Great Write!

Regards,

Matthew

Posted 14 Years Ago


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oh ..didn't expect the ending...how sad :(

Posted 14 Years Ago


very nice set up and twist ending. Heartbreaking piece! I enjoyed the read.
cheers!

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Misty Blue Eyes

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