Joy of Water

Red candles lit

Yellow and white flames

Lined up in a row

Soft ripples of water 

move around 

Lights off and quite fills the room

A body submerges 

Steam rises like flames 

In hailing all around

Leaning back and closing eyes

The water moves around on the body

Making the muscles loose

Caressing with a hand on the legs

Moving up and down the body slowly

Working the water into the skin

Biting a lip 

Working fingers up her stomach 

Smiling, thinking of wonderful things

Eyes snap open 

to the sound of a baby crying......

Reviews

[Cassiopia Summers]

Lmao, this is great! It's like a photo of someone's life. Fantastic write!

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

Way to grab a moment!

[Marty]

I think this is my favorite one yet! At first i wanted to run my own bubble bath, and at the end i remembered how many times this happened to me..... :)
love it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I have my two daughters back home with me with babies. No break for mama to rest and take a long bath. I like the gentle flow and story. Little rest for the mother's with children needing attention. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Hollow Man]

i think i got turned for a second and then...glad i don't have kids yet haha

[Nadi]

I think I've just read this poem twice and I love it. It feels like a snapshot right into someones life.

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oh yes..been there...earplugs work wonders...

[RTB]

awe relaxation and then snap back to reality with the sound of a childs cry and want or need good descripton good write

[Dream Weaver]

By far my favorite write from you.
I remember what my kids did to me
fortunately their all grown and gone.
Nicely done.

[Toon]

you have a characteristic of minimalism that i just can't quite put my finger on. keep writing.