Afarid

You took my breath away

How dare you stay

In the kitchen alone with no one around

I couldn't even stand my ground

I DIDN'T WANT YOU THERE

I hated you being in my house

I hated your stare

Your hands  on my wrists locking me there

I'm too scared to move, you lean in. 

pressing your lips on mine, my head spins

No No No go away 

But you don't care

Standing on my own confused 

You lean back on your heel and smile

How dare you? you are the most vile

Reviews

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

The heart and the mind become a fence.. and sometimes the trespassers forget that once there was a path.. This is a great piece of writing. Its the moments between yes and no, go and comeback...to finally.. never again. Theres alot of emotion here, the idea though is to use it in more than just writing next time.

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I like the emotion intertwined in this write. Powerful write.

[Dark Empress]

Good poem, I enjoyed it.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. You taught me a new word. I like the emotion and the ending. To be caught without escape can leave us in interesting situations. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote