Afarid

You took my breath away

How dare you stay

In the kitchen alone with no one around

I couldn't even stand my ground

I DIDN'T WANT YOU THERE

I hated you being in my house

I hated your stare

Your hands  on my wrists locking me there

I'm too scared to move, you lean in. 

pressing your lips on mine, my head spins

No No No go away 

But you don't care

Standing on my own confused 

You lean back on your heel and smile

How dare you? you are the most vile

Reviews

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

The heart and the mind become a fence.. and sometimes the trespassers forget that once there was a path.. This is a great piece of writing. Its the moments between yes and no, go and comeback...to finally.. never again. Theres alot of emotion here, the idea though is to use it in more than just writing next time.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Wow! this was some deep emotion put into this poem!

[~BlueSkyy~]

Very nice. :)

[My Fair Lady]

This evokes a lot of questions, and feelings for me. It brings to mind living in a home with abusive spouse.

[Tate Morgan]

Men are so primal nice write

[Graceful]

that is amazing. It is written so beautifly. I love it. You describe very well. Bravo or should i say brava

[silver threaded queen]

the voice seeking a form of revenge
LOVED IT

[J.M]

I love the description of confusion in this poem, a feeling that most of us know all too well and you captured it perfectly. As well as the clever little contradictions it was very vivid.

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this is interesting as you give a double meaning to the feelings of the narrator ...do they desire the person but hate that they do or are they actually disliking the attention..good write

[Cassiopia Summers]

I like it. It eminates the emotions within. Great write.

[Kelley]

I couldn't tell if you were playing or really mad but I liked your poem just the same.

Thanks for sharing.

Kelley