Afarid

You took my breath away

How dare you stay

In the kitchen alone with no one around

I couldn't even stand my ground

I DIDN'T WANT YOU THERE

I hated you being in my house

I hated your stare

Your hands  on my wrists locking me there

I'm too scared to move, you lean in. 

pressing your lips on mine, my head spins

No No No go away 

But you don't care

Standing on my own confused 

You lean back on your heel and smile

How dare you? you are the most vile

Reviews

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

The heart and the mind become a fence.. and sometimes the trespassers forget that once there was a path.. This is a great piece of writing. Its the moments between yes and no, go and comeback...to finally.. never again. Theres alot of emotion here, the idea though is to use it in more than just writing next time.

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

Wow this poem is good.. Nice

~SK

[YouoweYoupay]

Sweet. *Grin* I enjoyed reading this short romantic kitchen scene.

-Wella.

[Grace Catherine C.]

Very emotional, very angry, nicely done

[Jonathan]

Nice write seems as though you playing
hard to get :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

lock your doors. nice work.

[Wondering Mind]

gates close...Good writing

[Adrien Hupp]

It's a beautiful poem i love it great job:D keep writing:D

[Michael X]

Very good writing, the the talent is seen in each line, the construction of
this poem brought the expression to life, Wow.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

wow this is intense

[Morgan]

very good poem...
domestic violence is a horrid thing