Black Creature Of Shadow Mountain

made up my own creature and legend behind it so hope you enjoy kind of on the dark and creepy side but not as graphic as some of my pieces...

 

Through the mountain tops

The deadly legend will rise

A black creature with fangs

With yellow glowing eyes

It has spikes across its back

A midnight colored mane

Terror bleeds in its claws

It’s the new vision of pain

It hides the caves

Blends in with the dark

Feels the chills against your skin

With its moonlight hellish bark

It sneaks up from behind

Surprises you with one fatal whack

No time to run

As it jumps on top and begins to attack

Bites you with pointed teeth

Then begins to rip you apart

Bloods pours from its jaws

As it chomps down on your heart

The black creature of Shadow Mountain

Becomes a myth of this haunted place

Climb up towards the clouds of hell

Staring death right in the face!

 

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

What a scary write, what a scary creature, what an awesome pic to accompany it all!
Yikes, and I have to go in now and sleep by myself...NOT FAIR...where are my doggies????
I am scared this thing will get me in the night...

If I am not on the Cafe again then you know this creature has gotten me....smiles.........Oh no, I see yellow fire and yellow eyes in the hall......Sean, it's all your fault!

[Theresa]

Another well written overly creative poem. I believe I have said this before but if so I will say it again your poems create such a visual and such a great story. I can see your poems as excerpts in book since all of them can so easily be transformed form a poem to a novel. I always enjoy your work and this one was no exception. Nicely done.

[Tina Kline]

This is great. It's scary and sinister. A warning to others
not to go into the mountain or the legend could
become fact!

Very well written.
Love this poem!

Cool picture. It even gots a few bones there!

[deeps]

The black creature of Shadow Mountain
Becomes a myth of this haunted place
Climb up towards the clouds of hell
Staring death right in the face!

I think this is amazing, such a dark write here,
Wow! simply amazing

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Great dark portrayal of such a fierce beast.. another fantastic chilling write from a great writer! I loved the fact that this one could reach a large audience as it was not overly gory.. but still held the effects of putting the goosebumps on one's neck! Keep up the great writing.. I noticed you started a contest for new dark mythical creatures.. I will have to go take a look! Bravo yet again!