Black Creature Of Shadow Mountain

made up my own creature and legend behind it so hope you enjoy kind of on the dark and creepy side but not as graphic as some of my pieces...

 

Through the mountain tops

The deadly legend will rise

A black creature with fangs

With yellow glowing eyes

It has spikes across its back

A midnight colored mane

Terror bleeds in its claws

It’s the new vision of pain

It hides the caves

Blends in with the dark

Feels the chills against your skin

With its moonlight hellish bark

It sneaks up from behind

Surprises you with one fatal whack

No time to run

As it jumps on top and begins to attack

Bites you with pointed teeth

Then begins to rip you apart

Bloods pours from its jaws

As it chomps down on your heart

The black creature of Shadow Mountain

Becomes a myth of this haunted place

Climb up towards the clouds of hell

Staring death right in the face!

 

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

What a scary write, what a scary creature, what an awesome pic to accompany it all!
Yikes, and I have to go in now and sleep by myself...NOT FAIR...where are my doggies????
I am scared this thing will get me in the night...

If I am not on the Cafe again then you know this creature has gotten me....smiles.........Oh no, I see yellow fire and yellow eyes in the hall......Sean, it's all your fault!

[Jessica Danielle]

I can sort of picture the creature you were describing, but at the same time, i had a hard time shaping it together. overall though, its a very good write, thanks for sharing it!

[HorrorMaster]

Very amazing creature. I love this poem very much. :)

[S. Liberace]

this is pretty scary -- the imagery is awesome. :) the words you use are quite pleasant, and so is the rhyme scheme.

[nostal]

Very creepy poem.
Last line was pure gold.
What a scary way to end a poem.

[Magdelena]

My yikers sean! Your imagination is so extreem and fantastic i wonder what it would be like if you decided to make a movie.. Probably smashing sucess, that's what! This was a creeper for sure.. Now all the lights stay on, thank ya very much!!!! LOL

WOW!

Mags xx

[TamiViolet]

Wouldn't it be amazing if all the creatures you create actually do come to life? Your imagination is one of a kind, Sean. Interesting how you use the term 'clouds of hell' as hell is taking the elevator down. Or is it?

I need a hug now cause I'm scared :-) Really, though, excellent work with a brilliant descriptive flair. I agree with Michael in that you are a master of horror, among other wonderful things...

[Michael X]

awsome and mysterious sean, you never cease to amaze me my friend, and here you describe the legend, the creature of shadow mountain, i would love to read more off this, as well. and as always frightening, but subtle enough to give the readers a shiver before they look away, master of horror, keep it up!

[Fran Marie]

It has spikes across its back
A midnight colored mane
Terror bleeds in its claws
It's the new vision of pain

ooohhhhhhhh this is a creepy creature to be sure one I would not like

to run into on a dark night~ scary to the max! Great Pen my friend!

[Eric Cox]

Wow! Cool and dark. Great imagery and written well. A very creative write.

[An owl on the moon]

You create an amazing atmosphere of legend come to life. This is a dynamic, wonderful write that is loaded with dark imagery. Thanks for sharing your talent here!