ANYONE

 a person doesn't need to be right, they just need to be there.
breathing the same air,
the kind that makes your chest cold and your throat itch,
or the kind that is thick, hot and sticky.

 

you don't need to have the answer, just give me something else to think about.
a trouble, a joke, a pointless sentence about anything at all.

 

because i'm sitting at my kitchen table eating saltines with apple jelly for dinner,
peering out my window as the sun begins to set,
listening to new stories told through old headphones,
and it's all so terribly sad,
vacant and sad.

 

and my mailbox fills up with nothing but junky coupons and bills,
still i pad out barefoot everyday to check.
the sun so bright i squint so hard.

 

sometimes i think i'm brave
most times i can see that i am still scared me
the scenery has just changed.

 

there are so many things great in my life,
please give me the eyes to see.

Reviews

[Jaclyn]

I don't know why I bother reviewing your stuff. How many times can I say you rock? :) Captures the loneliness and need for companionship and CONTACT perfectly.

[Shantanu]

Excellent !!! The feeling of solitude is wondefully conveyed. Very well written - all the lines are just perfect. Infact due to certain circumstances I have had had to exerience the solitude you are talking about and your poem very well reflects the feelings that go through your head in such a situation

[Brentley]

I liked the way you put that there. The music is a nice touch, letting the reader feel things, with several different senses.

[Sarah Ott]

god i've been there. you summed up the angst of living isolated and soothed the aesthetic needed to survive in such scenarios. mine was apple mint jelly though. ; ) and pilot crackers. same thing.
i especially like the beginning as well, imagining the realism of someone actually there, you don't paint a fantasy but rather find comfort or hope in the reality of a response, a human connection. at least thats what i got out of it. lol.

[Mariah]

love it. your poetry is all very real. almost raw. not thought out. perfect.

[RAWR!]

"listening to new stories told through old headphones, "

in the mids of my melancholia a brilliant simple written line like that one really echoes some sort of warmth.

[Maria G.]

I love this as i can totally relate to the fear and feeling of isolation in this.

a person doesn't need to be right, they just need to be there.
breathing the same air,
the kind that makes your chest cold and your throat itch,
or the kind that is thick, hot and sticky.

I love these lines, we tend to take people for granted and concentrate on flaws when really all that is important is they are there as you express here.

enjoyed this.

[Ryan Merritt]

It's the everyday, the mundane things, that can remind us how small and meaningless we sometimes feel. I really like this one. rachel to the core. I'm so glad you joined up and cant wait to read more. But not all at once. I like to soak things in and I can't do that if I read too much. That only applies to poetry or spoken word or what have you. anyway, welcome to writers cafe.

[shel]

you don't need to have the answer, just give me something else to think about.
a trouble, a joke, a pointless sentence about anything at all.

So I read this once & put it in my library to read again & review later, because I'm supposed to be writing but my mind is wandering, lol... Then came right back and read it again. And one more time. This one's REALLY hitting a nerve with me, and I wish I had something better to say...the only thing that threw me a little was the 2nd to the last line, the 'i as still scared me', but I think I get how it is meant to be read. I really like this...I looked over a few others that you have posted too, and I'm definitely going to be coming back to read them more thoroughly!