Lots of pain and torment here and you've conveyed your grief well. It flows well too and your ideas are linked cohesively, well done! I felt your deep sadness and your lament for her....
This truly touched my soul since this is how I am feeling right now. You expressed it so well, the loss of a loved one. Thank you for this heartfelt write.
I like the refrain verse. I also think that tears and pain are a vital part of ever poet's emotional tool kit. If we haven't felt pain we are not in touch with half of life. You have it all in this poem, with great emphasis on water, rain, tears, seas and depths. The soul is almost and ocean, The Soul Ocean. In silence and tears is I think a line that Byron used somewhere. But I may be wrong.
Silence can be deafening.. It can pound away and you have definitely conveyed a good image of the way we can hold things in but the pain brings inner screams that refuse to remain silent and when there is no release.... Silence can be all consuming.
Nicely done.
You know, I can write about almost any subject, in poetic form and even an ocasional short story, but I find it most difficult to write about myself.
I am an artist at heart and will use whatever m.. more..