Dancing In the Rain

This was formerly titled Feeling Naughty but as was pointed out in a review the title didn't work . I hope this serves the piece better. Please let me know.

Feeling Naughty, She started this, but I remember our first kiss.
No resisting, as if I tried, her hands on me, I let them glide.
Forth and back, to and fro, our bodies intwined in the ebb of the flow.

Heated passions we could ignite, the kiss that smoldered through the night.
Free of burden or a care, we danced in the sprinkeler wetting us there.
Our passions exploding to the breeze, that single kiss, brought my knees.
We live in a world full of bliss, but I wont always miss, that last kiss.

So if I see you on that road again, my heart will feel the passion within.
I'll set the darkness to a blaze, I feel inside of you all the haze.
You set the night to a light, my soul a glow, this feels just right.
Your kiss again, on lips it lingers, I feel its caress, if not its fingers.

Reviews

[AJ Kristiansen]

Mmmm.. wow! Loved it! Wanted to be there myself realmwriter... you captured well that moment.. that night of passion, of fun... of something that lingers... the caress of a kiss... great!

[Mary Fioratti]

How beautiful and meaningful poem! Here you let your heart speak, and the
memories are so vivid! One kiss is never forgotten. Even the taste. The moment. The heart racing.
Loved it!
*Mary*

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

Held me in sort of an enchantment until the very last word. You're random rhyming pattern kept things interesting. I espiecally like the sprinkler you added in there. And the fact that it was night made things espiecally more magical. :) Not sure if the title is fitting, but it's a damn good piece :)

[Ronn Michael Salinas]

nice

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is Beautiful I loved it!

[Enigma]

Wonderful and captivating. The flow is velvety smooth and fast and I loved the rhymes. Loved it.

[CHRIS ANDES]

real piece...

[Ruth]

Superb nostalgia and naughtiness lol
I love this....makes it feel real with the imagery's power :) xx

[joshua deathdealer]

Wow very nicely done. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.