You've Been Deleted

You've Been Deleted

A Poem by realmwriter

  Denizens of the deepest,

of the deepest of my thoughts!

Spinning webs of spider silk,

of silver glass and spiders milk.

 

  Cripple this, this feeble sole

cripple it no more

Distroy this thing,

this thing you've built.

Give back this man his mind.

 

  Now you leave, leave now,

out of this crippled, feeble mind

Give back what you stole,

give back the youth you took.

 

  Take it back, take back the pain,

the pain this youth you've delt!

Take it away, all away,

this pitty that you felt!

 

  Denizens of the deepest, of the deepest of my thoughts!

I have found you out, I will root you out.

I will sweep you from every crevis; every crack

every corner, every cravas and cliff and chink

I will delete you from the motherboard

I will delete you from my mind.

© 2011 realmwriter


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Yes! A fantastic rhythm that paces faster and faster. Excellent verse!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice metaphor throughout. I agree with OT--nice rhythm! Loved it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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nice language plays - to delete and move on - I wish we could delete as easily as on a computer - erase - great rhythm throughout - nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A great and powerful poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Word choice was remarkable!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

amzing awesome this oem was really cool !:) like how you put everything ! love the pem !:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sweet work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I was a little lost but then I read it over and I could clearly see what I was missing! Excellent and full of pique!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is an old world feel to this and I like that, and your word usage was truely Excellent. :0)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Harrison, AR



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You know, I can write about almost any subject, in poetic form and even an ocasional short story, but I find it most difficult to write about myself. I am an artist at heart and will use whatever m.. more..

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