Part of Me

  Part of me is lying

Part of me is crying

And part of me remembers you.

 

  Part of me hiding

Part of me is running

And part of me is chasing you.

 

  Part of me is bleeding

Part of me is diying

But every part of me wants you.

 

  Part of me is aching

Part of me is breaking

And part of me forgot about you.

 

  Part of me remembers, all the s**t you said.

Part of me remembers, you where good in bed.

And part of me wants nothing more to do with you.

 

  You took every part of me, and cast them to the see.

Now every part of me HATES you!

You took all the parts of me and burned them to the ground.

Now every part of me is falling all around.

 

  Part of me still hates you for all the s**t you did.

Part of me still loves you for all the s**t you hid.

Part of me still cries, and part of me still dies.

But part of me still remembers all the good times that we had

And part of me still forgets all the pain with no regrets.

 

  So does your concious fry, with every little lie?

Cause part of me still loves you.

Part of me still needs you.

But part of me still want to kill you.

And part of me still wants to save you.

So why cant you just one time see, that all of this is Part of ME.

 

So part of me can feel every part of you,

Not the part that I once knew.

Now part of me is dreaming,

Every part of this and part of me is waking,

From the nightmare of my bliss!

 

Author's Note

Please feel free to critique this piece. It is supposed to be a song but again, I dont write music though I do have a tempo and bit of a melody in my head. JUst no place to get it out.

Reviews

[Ripple of Aqua]

you were lying when you said that every part of you HATES 'you'.

[Amy Bumpas]

This is a strong and very emotional poem. I would like to add that
you had some spelling mistakes: Part of me is lieing(lying)
Part of me is dieing(dying)
Part of me is acheing(aching)
Part of me is brakeing(braking)
Part of me remebers, you where good in bed.(remembers)
The very last two stanzas are too long and need to be more
in poetic form.

I think we all have been where this poem leads us...

[Kenneth The Poet]

Good piece on the whole, it is emotionally pulling and awesome.

Correct your misspellings and make the last stanza more like the one before in terms of formatting.

Otherwise, it is very good