Blood In the Rain

Blood In the Rain

A Poem by realmwriter

  The sum of my fears
Culled together in the sum of my tears
Poured out at my feet

like there is blood in the rain.

The sum of my insanity
Held together by a string frayed and worn.
Tattered and torn,

like there is blood in the rain.

The pain in the joy
The joy in the pain, on display for all to mock.
To gawk and stare, point and judge
To scream and curse, wallow and wail,
Sing and dance, like there is blood in the rain.

The hatrid, the rage, the decay, the stench of deprevity
Putrisity lingering around every corner, filling every orifice
Swelling your lungs, turbid as a cloud.
The ashes descending with the snow,  
Dissolving within the blood in the rain.

Contaminated you see yourself again
You see it in me, I cant keep it anymore.
Spreading like a disease, infecting every little thing.
You Must have sulfur in your veins,
Because I can smell your blood in the rain.

No fear of the inevitable, just the how.
Not the when, just the ware.

Not the deprevity, just the stench.
Not the infection, just the rate of spread.
No fear of the pain, only of the blood in the rain.

© 2014 realmwriter


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That's funny I read the title on my read request and went WHAT?! Totally forgot we had talked about this one. I love it though you're description is spot on and everything lines together so that I really feel the fury in this piece. And possibly a hint of sadness? Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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12 Years Ago

I really appreciate it, Thank You...!
Nice piece. I like the construction of your words in this one..well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Well organized, meaningful piece with great lines.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


Devious. And enthralling.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


Still think this is incredible my friend.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


very well written, though I think a few words here and there could be removed to make it even more powerful than it is..that's just my highly uneducated opinion. Overall, I think it is a great piece, with good imagery and metaphor.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


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hi

just wanted you to know that im woring on this one for ya, and ill have something in a day or so.

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Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is powerful. The imagery you use in this piece definitely struck a cord with me. I'm not usually a fan of rhyme or repetition but you do it well. Kudos!

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Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is amazing work...flawless to me :) You use imagery so well....powerfully so! xx

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You know, I can write about almost any subject, in poetic form and even an ocasional short story, but I find it most difficult to write about myself. I am an artist at heart and will use whatever m.. more..

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