Am Lost Within Me

 

In this world I've been lost for over 30 years
Until you found me and helped me shed my tears

For I know somewhere in this heart of despair
I'll find the strength to heal this tare

 

Within this broken heart
Are pieces falling apart
Within this broken soul is
This life has come apart

Inside your mind I will find
The piece of me I need to see

Inside my heart I'll take apart
The piece of me that cannot be

 

I've come a long way in this slowly dying day
When all is lost and nothing can be gained
I'll find my way and there I'll stay

Been lost through all these years
Shed many a torrential decaying tears
Mine heart will heal mine soul awake

My mind be the my pain to free

Mine time is come to leave behind these fears

Mine times is come to shed no more my tears

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Dec 18, 2010

Author's Note

Seeking Critique.
I've made some alterations to the form and added a line at the end. Please let me know what you think of this revised version .o11

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

You might want to double-check the spelling of some of your words, but otherwise this piece is good. It has taken me a while to accept this, but breaking a work into couplets and stanzas makes for easier reading. Otherwise, this is a strong and solid peace.

[Yina]

In the first version, I commented that I love the last line, well, now I love the last 2 lines:) I feel like you looked in my heart when you wrote this. Very touching for me

[IceDragonOfPluto]

a savior found from love. a light found from darkness. a happiness to ease the pain.