Stricken To Be Alone

  Alone in a crowded room, silently sit the middle.
Think right there, in the void, everyone stepping round.
Look at them, stare at you, feel every piercing sound.
  Slip quietly still into the eyes, see back through their blaze.
That purest light, that light so bright, it snatches out the faze.
Echo fast, hear the sound, before it hits the ear.
Feel the wave, the wave to whip, slip silently into sound.
Rack your head, crack your knuckles, dance your chair around.
  Watch them back, stare them down, don't let them take you in.
Prying in, pulling out, vision panic, fighting foe nor friend.
Take your pain, tare it out, pry it from dead hand.
Unrest its lock, free its prize, finding in captivity there.
Read the written, behold the words, let take lest tole be taught.
  Fleet the fighting, fast the panic, stricken to be alone.
Reap the whaling, wall thy will, , keep hold the furious tide.
Purge the stricken, band together, take the accusations as they come.
Look back again, forget the not forgotten and pay the healthy sum.

Author's Note

Ignore minor grammar issues. Feel free to point out any major grammar and spelling errors. I'm also interested to know what you think about this piece and my writing style.

Reviews

[Briana O'Connor]

I think the slight falter in grammar added emphasis to the solitude. This was so deep. I just loved the way you described the feeling of loneliness. It was like being in a trance reading this piece. Excellent work!

[realmwriter]

Man you do go way back don't you? I haven't read this one in a while myself. Was a lone foe a time, but not now. Still write a lot of dark stuff though. Glad that you liked it and thank you so much for the stellar review.

[Briana O'Connor]

I like to paruze through peoples stuff. I'm sure people get sick of the same stuff being reviewed over and over and over and over and well you get the point :P

[realmwriter]

I know I do. It's nice to get reviews and older works. Thank you for that.