Poetry Be Damned

  The phony, the fake, you made a mistake

Now it's all right there on the page

Your white canvas, covered in black

A brush stroke you can never take back

But with every crossed out line or misspelled word

You paint your canvas with the rare and the absurd

A misplaced stroke of a nervous brush becomes a sonnet in the pens hurried rush

Parchment takes hold to tell the untold and be the burnished voice of the bold

Does it have to look real to capture the zeal

Do the colors have to be bright to capture the dark from the light

Is the brush stroke so grand, as to take it's own stand

Can the pen declare a master piece painted without cease

But where on the page does such a tragedy occur

Does the brush stroke tell of absolutes and sure

Does the pen capture practiced scroll in flawed form 

Does not the brush capture memory, fluid in its thought

Against the will of the painter the brush glides across the nude canvas

The pen across the blank page creates the world despite the anxious 

When the painter listens to what the pen conveys, it's called art

If the writer listens to what the brush conveys it's lunacy apart

Yet should the pen break the rules, the brush will demand

The art will be created, the piece written, poetry be damned

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Meh. You lost your rhythm in stanza #3 and it went crazy in stanza #4. That could not have been your intention, because a writer of poetry is courteous to his/her reader...a writer of poetry respects his/her reader by being mindful of how the poem reads in his/her head. You have fingers, yeah? Use them to count. Syllables. Unless you're doing stream-of-consciousness poetry (which is a genre you should not even ATTEMPT until you master freestyle) leave the unstructured poetry to the experts.

[realmwriter]

Thank you for your constructive criticism.

[Riley Justine]

I love this. It really puts a perspective on poetry that no one really addresses. But anyone who writes knows that all of this is, in fact, true. I aspire to be able to write like you one day.

[realmwriter]

I am flattered by your words. Thank you very much and I have read some of your work. You write well, don't be so hard on yourself.

[Ruth]

Process of artistry is often a sacrifice I find...in many ways, poignant hon xo

[realmwriter]

Thank you Poppy. I appreciate it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

poetry pretty much writes itself i believe....we are the instruments, like the pen or the brush---
i really like the tone of this piece...almost a poet self-depricating...and wondering...are we really artists, as well as those who create music or paint pictures?

[realmwriter]

We are indeed artists. Be it with a brush or pen, we create art. Thank you very much for your review, I appreciate it.

[....................]

You are kindly welcome. - FT

[Rene Salinas]

Thanks for the invite Realm! Your writing came to me as a combination of feelings of dissatisfaction and feeling of acceptance. Both trying to gain ground. The line the phony the fake well could just be about many things but the fact that the judgment of mistake comes in -- as a mistake means it doesn't agree with you. Then the most accepting tone kicks in. As if saying that every mistake made will be in the pursue of honesty of expression. That's really good in my eyes. It continues trying to relate the intentions with the expressions. A difficult proposition really most of the time I only get a view after doing something not while I'm doing it. The last bit for me very relevant. If indeed I'm gettting the right picture. Keep it inscrutable. Be true to what you feel. What the rest may think? Does it matter? Is it real?

All valid questions.

Thank you again for your invite Realm.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much for those thoughtful words. That really means a lot to me. I was trying to get across the idea that, though we may make mistakes, we might as well embrace them as [part of who we are. Not one sole is perfect and we are all going to make mistakes, it's just harder to learn for some. I think I am still trying to learn to embrace them myself. Thank you again.

[Rene Salinas]

All the same boat I think Realm. I don't think that learning ever stops. Thanks again.

[realmwriter]

No, I don't think it does either.

[Jamestown]

Fantastic writing! I enjoyed reading every word, great flow and
well thought out, thanks for sharing and b-blessed.

[realmwriter]

You are very welcome. thank you for reading it. I appreciate it. You b blessed as well.