Humility in the Vase

 Have no ego where to write
But where pride is laid aside
Ego burns true and bright

Have no power where to pray
But where laid this vanity aside
Feet are humble where they stay

Have no right where there is wrong
But where the head is laid aside
A whisper slow and soft to song

A melody to charm sleep from the sandman

An utterance to quiet the troubled child

A warm, caring touch to comfort the soul

Peace in the eye of the hurricane

Power in the humility of a babe

Prejudice in pride of man 

In the fury of the fire, we find ourselves humbled, on our knees

Reviews

[Bright Ocean Star]

Realmwriter, I love this! I love the artisitc time it took you to form this vase of words. Very, very nice! One quick fix, though. 4th Stanza, 2nd line..."an utterance to quite the troubled child"...I think you meant to write 'quiet" instead of "quite". A simple thing. I do that all the time, myself. Great lines, though. Each and every one. I especially like "prejudice in pride of man". I love the texture of alliteration in all its forms, and you write it all quite well. Thank you again!

[realmwriter]

Thank you for pointing that out. I hadn't noticed it and did indeed mean quiet not quite. i am very happy that you like this piece. It means a lot to me. Thank you very much.

[Warren Daniel II]

Had no idea what to expect when I saw the title. I really enjoyed this poem "In the fury of the fire, we find ourselves humbled, on
our knees" I find this line to be very true and is the line that had the most impact on me. Very well written.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. I truly appreciate it. I am curious, how did you come across this piece?

[Warren Daniel II]

No problem, I came across it on the feeds someone had just reviewed it, and I decided to give it a look.

[realmwriter]

Okay. Thank you for answering my question. That rocks. I didn't know my poems were getting any play on the feed. Nice to know.

[Jamestown]

Fabulous piece of work, I love this! Message is terrific, thanks for sharing, I did a piece called
sweet sounds you might enjoy, thanks again and b-blessed!

[realmwriter]

I am happy that you enjoyed this. i will pop over and give your's a read right now. Thank you very much.

[AJ Kristiansen]

Wow! Well done realmwriter! I love this! So well expressed... "a whisper slow and soft to song" so beautiful and tender... laying aside the ego.. yes and finding humility on our knees, finding answers in the complexities of life :) Beautiful!

[realmwriter]

Thank you so very much. I am pleased that you enjoyed this and I very much appreciate your time in reading and reviewing it.

[SheenLeigh]

The title was catchy . and the poem is really well written :))

[realmwriter]

Thank you so much. I appreciate it.

[R Smith]

lovely work, a charm in every line, a hope in every stanza, just remarkable :)

[realmwriter]

Well thank you very much. I truly appreciate it and I am glad that you like it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A telling and intuitive piece well done good read

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. Happy you like this one as well.

[Riley Justine]

I really like how the layout matches with the title in this poem! It was the first thing I noticed when I opened this piece. Not sure if you meant to do that or not, but it creates a nice, creative touch! This is an amazingly written piece as well. Just one thing in stanza 4, verse 2: did you mean "An utterance to [quiet] the troubled child"? I feel like that would make more sense. Otherwise really well done!

[realmwriter]

Yes I did mean that. Dang those typos. Thank you very much for your review. It means a lot to me. The layout wasn't intentional, though it did inspire the title.

[Lyn Anderson]

One of my faves of yours. Well done and effective use of form for maximum impact.

[realmwriter]

The form actually inspired the Title. Just happened that way. I liked it so I went with it. Thank you very much KL. I am very happy that you like it.

[MomzillaNC]

A very moving piece.

NOTES: "Furry" fire? I think you meant, "fury."

[realmwriter]

Oops, yes I did. Thank you for pointing that out. I'll fix immediately. I'm glad that you like this Zilla, Thank you.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

LOL - "Furry" fire!

[realmwriter]

Sounds kind of cool though. You know, such as fire certainly is warm. So why not warm and fuzzy? :)

[MomzillaNC]

Okay… that's the perspective of not just a twisted mind, but one that is actually sprained! (to paraphrase a D. Adams quote). :D

[realmwriter]

"Sprained", I love it. Thank you.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :D