Dancing Among the Fireflies

My heart was captured by fire

My mind was captured by desire

I wandered through the land, heady deep in thought

 

You took my hand a guide

I felt as if to glide

I see into the eyes, keeping thee fervent

 

The fog roled in and dampend the ground

My footsteps landed without a sound

I floated with you, through stars and tumbeling clouds

 

Eternity could play out here before my eyes

Stay right here forever, just to listen to your sighs

Your voice, like music carried on the wind, comes as soft as loving grace

 

My heart was captured by fire

My mind was captured by desire

You took me there, dancing among the fireflies.

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

Anything involving fireflies immediately grabs my attention, and I am glad it did because this was a wonderful journey to be taken on.

The fog roled in and dampend the ground
My footsteps landed without a sound
I floated with you, through stars and tumbeling clouds

Great lines here full of description not only to visualize, but to feel as well.

[Rowan Storm]

It's like a fairy tale, but more of the wild darkness than the bright castles or cottages. The contrast by bringing lights that you could imagine the light guiding you into the night sky. Very well done

[realmwriter]

Thank you always for your kind words my friend. it really means a lot to me.

[Ruth]

When heart and mind are captured, the journey is more pleasurable and willing, beautiful imagery hon. Serene moments bestowed with a grace and thankfulness x

[realmwriter]

Thank you so much Poppy. How very thoughtful.

[Ayushi]

"My heart was captured by fire
My mind was captured by desire
You took me there, dancing among the fireflies."
Sweet and refreshing write..well done :)

[realmwriter]

Thank you so very much for your review, I truly do appreciate it.

[The Revisionist]

" Eternity could play out here before my
eyes
Stay right here forever, just to listen to
your sighs"

- I found this piece enchanting and absolutely loved this line!^

[realmwriter]

I swear, I smile every time I get a review. I am happy that you liked it. Thank you so very much. I truly appreciate it.

[The Revisionist]

your most welcome, it was such a pleasure to read this piece :)

[Susan Beth Horvath]

What a refreshing piece.. Beautifully penned

[realmwriter]

Thank you Very Much Susan. I'm glad you liked it.

[Rene Salinas]

I felt I was going around on a cycle, a cycle of openness and honesty, a cycle of acceptance and unity, and even in times of doubt untiy still stood out, and the enchanting description of intent right in the middle that makes one continue the quest, and just as it started it finished with the admitance of having got there.

What a journey

Thankyou

[realmwriter]

You are most welcome. I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Thank you as well my friend for the very kind review.

[A. Amos]

There are some poets who just write poetry and there are some poets...who know the art of creating pieces full of sparks. Reading your poetry truly made me feel the sparks, respect!

[realmwriter]

Thank you so much my friend. I am glad that you felt the sparks. That is truly what poetry is about, to feel it, otherwise it's just empty words on a page.

[A. Amos]

Agree and you're most welcome...

[anne]

Beauty......
My heart was captured by fire
My mind was captured by desire
You took me there,dancing among the fireflies......nicely imagined and beautifully conveyed......

[realmwriter]

Thank you so very much. It means a lot to me. I know I say that in just about every review comment, but it isn't because I am trying to convince my self, it is because I truly mean it. I grin like a chesire cat with every review I read because I cannot believe how well I have been recieved. Again, thank you so very much.

[anne]

You have done a good job,keep penning and keep receiving appreciation.....my pleasure...anytime :)