I Fear His Is Broken

A person I called my friend and I think called me friend as well was beaten for costing another man his job and his girlfriend. I had nothing to do with that. But still I wear this crown of guilt.

I bared witness to a man
A man who was about to receive his just desserts.
A man I called my friend.
I am guilty, of turning my back on him.

He won't look me in the eye anymore
He doesn't say a word
He has let himself go
And I am afraid his just desserts weren't so just.

He got what he deserved, yes.
He got a little more than that as well
I'm afraid it will break him
I fear that it will break me too.

I bared witness to a man
A man who was about to receive his just desserts.
A man I called my friend.
I am guilty, of turning my back on him.

"Please help" he cried
And though is voice did not fall on def ears
I heard not his plea to me.
I turned my back, now I fear his is broken.

Reviews

[Daisy Morgy]

I really enjoyed the imagery that you present and the connotation of the words desserts :) brilliant poem well thought out and executed nicely

[Pete Langley]

The hard part of friendship is accepting the other`s faults, but it is never - or shouldn`t be - unconditional. Loyalty makes it harder to be critical, but sometimes other people make up your mind for you. That`s what happened here. Don`t blame yourself. P.

[realmwriter]

I do not blame myself any longer as he and I have since apologized and are still good friends...! Thank you for the review I do appreciate it very much...!

[Dean Kuch®]

You can't help the guilt that you feel for what has happened to your friend. And, you can't help but worry about him as he deals with the ramifications of his actions. That's what friends, really TRUE friends, do for each other. You can, however, absolve yourself from all blame. It was not you who forced his hand. He is the one who played it. You just observed what was dealt out afterwards.

And though [is]his voice did not fall on[ def]deaf ears

[realmwriter]

I am over the guilt. As I realized the same thing I just read in your review. Creepy. I like it...! Thank you very much for the read and review

[Dean Kuch®]

I have that effect on people. And, you're welcome...

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

I am sorry to hear that this has happened to your friend, we may always bear that feeling of quilt, but we are not always to blame. For all you know he may not have been a true friend after all. You may not have been physically responsible but your quilty feelings have set in. I love how this flows nicely together. Great write my friend. And remember we are not always to blame.

[realmwriter]

Thank You for wise words to remember...! We are still friends and I have gotten over my guilt.

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

You are more then welcome, and I am so glad to hear that.

[realmwriter]

Glad to be able to say it...! Okay fine type it...! lol

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Haha I told you so! Just kiddin!! But I am glad that you are able to say it. And wow I just realized I am way younger then you and I seem to have the wisdom...shouldn't it be the other way around?! Hahah :))

[realmwriter]

It should indeed. But that is not a bad thing. Yes, wisdom does come from age. but on the same side of the coin, one can obtain wisdom from simply observing the world around them and watching how people interact with each other...!

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

I agree with you on that one.

[R.A. Youngblood]

I like your style of writing, for example: "He got what he deserved, yes.", and that "yes" at the end, not at the beggining, it really fits, yes! xD I love it, really. I have nothing to critique here. Nicely written, I can see the point, cool structure and strange but beautiful style. Thanks for sharing, my fellow writer! :D

[realmwriter]

You're very welcome. I'm still not quite sure what folks mean by "strange writing style" I get it all the time, and take it as a compliment believe me. I just don't see the strange part I guess.

Thank You ever so much for reading and reviewing...!

[CHRIS ANDES]

a very clear image of a man
thanks for the share
;)

[realmwriter]

You're welcome and thanks for the review...!

[CHRIS ANDES]

anytime ;)

[quinfinn]

you have a very good writing skill my friend. i am always impressed with your writes. this is awesome.

[realmwriter]

Again, I say, Thank You so much and am happy that you liked it...!

[quinfinn]

welcome

[Don Shaw]

wow a very strong write> i love it!!

[realmwriter]

Thank You. Based on a true event. And I really do feel guilty for it...!

[Don Shaw]

Guilt will only hold ya down brother

[realmwriter]

Yeah I know man. It will go away in time. But I think it best to let it run its doe coarse.