Moon Cast Lies

This one is a little differant for me.

 The sun shed light unto the moon,

cast off the dark unto the gloom,

danced in shadow and threw a spark,

sparked a fire unto the night,

to play forlorn in the light.

 

 Wait peacefully by thine own side

As the night light pulls thy tide.

Watch the sun consume thine fear

Never worry, there is none here.

 

 Asked thine questions, have thee none!

Questions answered, no not one.

Gravity of thine deeds has wayed thee down

Jest in truth to wear thy frown.

 

 Dispel thine lies with tears of shame

Paint thine own picture to break thine frame

Guilt of hiding will cast its' doubt.

Regret, remorse, will cast thee out.

Reviews

[PurpleQuartz]

This is brilliance! You have your own unique style of writing that made this poem bloom! The imagery you have created is great.

[Ruth]

Nice use of powerful imagery love...
Your poetry takes me to a place where emotions can be identified :)
xoxo

[realmwriter]

Thank you Poppy. I always enjoy reading your work too...!

[Ruth]

♥

[afra]

wow very different write ...i enjoyed it ...well done

[realmwriter]

Thank You so much.

[That_Girl]

I think the 'the' s in the third stanza should be 'thee' but I'm not positive. I like it though, it's different from what I usually read. :)

[realmwriter]

Yes I see what you mean. I fixed it just now. Thank you for pointing that out. I did have it written that way in my original, just didn't catch on the screen. Thanx for reading me.

[quinfinn]

very good prose here...small suggestion: get in tense with thy, thou, thine to perfect this write...some are in the wrong station. wonderful that you retroed
some pronouns in the classical format!

[Lily Mae]

This is so different from what I've read from you before. .Nicely done.. Casting out pain, regret and remorse is so freeing.. embracing the new that is next is the great embrace :) xo

[realmwriter]

I still have yet to do that, embrace the new. Thank you for reading it.