Friction Of The Fraught

Dance in dark
Delight in days
Revel in reality slipping slowly to the gray.
Inky black comfort dripping into haze.

Distraught in denial
Damaged in disdain
Remembered reason trembling in shadows to the grave.
Nervous the edge of sanity sinking slowly below the brave.

Cringe in quiet
Crumble in cacophony
Bask in benign indifference to the coming of the fray.
Shape the broken mold into which is squeezed the clay.

Form in function
Friction in fruition
Extrapolate from nothing what is real of what is fake.
Drive doom through the heart wooden to the stake.

Damaged and destroyed, disturbed and distraught, this is the friction of the fraught.

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

This poem has an interesting structure and is very lyrical and fun to read; I enjoyed it.
I cant fathom what this poem is about really; it's mysterious and borderline impenetrable, but maybe that's part of the charm. Nice job.

[realmwriter]

Glad you liked it and thank you very much for the discriptive review. I would say that the "borderline impenetrablebility is part of the charm. Really though, it is about trying to make since of chaose in a world that wishes to be ordered when order is but a form of control. Though control is imposed on us all we wish we needed it not.Thus I am lead to the conclusion that there is friction in all that we attempt.

[realmwriter]

*chaos* not chaose. Dag...!

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

wow. this is...just, oh my gosh. everything I wanted to say about this has already been said. I will be recommending this poem to A LOT of people. Great work.

[realmwriter]

Cool. I am really glad you liked it. And thank you so much for sharing it. and reading it...!

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

My pleasure :)

[Ruth]

Intensity held tenderly ...laments poised over tongue and flame...purged and left to roam, ether has a good way of letting sorrow heal :)
Hugs xoxo

[realmwriter]

Thank you Poppy xoxo to you as well...! :)

[MoriartyMesa]

The flow is nice, little edits are needed. But your work is always worth the look.

[realmwriter]

Would you be so kind as to point out the little edits? Thank you very much...!

[Adam M. Snow]

Amazing, such emotions in this intense write.. Truly amazing.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much I do appreciate it...!

[Adam M. Snow]

You are so welcome

[Lily Mae]

Very intense..and powerful.. you penned these emotions well. .but then again you always do :) xo

[realmwriter]

Wow, Thank you. and most of the time I reread what I wrote and think I'm not getting my point accross, at least to me. Again, thank you so much...!

[Mazie Tackett]

awh so sad i wanna cry now you made me wanna cry :'(

[realmwriter]

I'm so sorry but thank you for reading it...!

[Mazie Tackett]

lol

[Jon Settle]

The power of this poem. The words hold such strength. It's so dark yet so visual. Amazing piece of writing!

[realmwriter]

Thank you for the review and for reading this piece. I am glad you enjoyed it...!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Absolutely wonderful. Your writing improves with every read. Never stop writing my talented friend. Amazing work.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much Neva...! And I never will...

[afra]

wow strong and dark ....well done

[realmwriter]

Thank you again. I am happy that you enjoyed it.