BEEN BITTER

An incantation for Denise. This is about six years old.

BEEN BITTER
Incantation for Denise

Mind body and soul
Blood sweat and tears
Bottomless hole
Filled full of fears

I gave you what I wanted
May not have been much
T was to be supported
In thought and in touch

Your Soul is a hole
It is a Bottomless pit
My Blood, sweat, and tears
Will Never fill it
NO NO NO NO Will Will Will Will
Will ever fill it

You didn’t ask me to
You said, with a sneer
“It’s what people do”
I did it for years

I swallowed it whole
Hook, line, and sinker
Dove in your hole
Couldn’t get any deeper

My heart always pounding
I dream of sleep
I dream of waking
My own soul to keep

Such a sad swan song
I mated for life
I took a phantom, I took it wrong
I made it my wife

Reviews

[turning violet]

I have felt like this before. bitter... still do at times...
very nice descriptions throughout. I felt this one.

[emmajoy]

Venting in words is like washing with carbolic soap, there's an after-effect one thinks has washed out the bad and sad. In this you turn your heart inside out, tho your mind controlled the punctuation, hopefully the job's near done. These words really fly at the reader, your pain's more than obvious.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Wow, powerful words. The bitterness definitely comes across as well as anger and then hopelessness. Very well written.

[Beckie D]

The whole time reading this, I just wanted to know who the subject was. Great work! It's been a while since I've read a good lines/stanza poem, they can often get boring but this one was pretty good.
I like the anger in it, or really I like how I really saw and felt the anger in it.

[Audrey Howitt]

What an emotionally powerful piece--especially the last stanza---and I echo Muse's welcome!

[Muse]

Such a sad swan song
I mated for life
I took a phantom, I took it wrong
I made it my wife

Ouch! Need more be said? Very clever..very unique...welcome to WC.