instead of "and" (2nd last line) try "then"
i think it will work nicely the and doesn't seem to bring the poem to a close like the last line-- "then" instead of "and" would be like an introduction to the ending--- know what I mean?
this really has a great flow , esp. the 2nd read around
A quandary, a problem, a mischief of circumstance, a collision of two ways of thinking, behaving ..
Seems you'll know or not and that's the start and finish of it. Sometimes, sadly, sometimes, cruelly, we have to find the courage to leave things be. Hurts, hurts like crazy hell, but ultimately, it works because finally the door's shut, bolted and barred.
Ah, so. Sadly in that case my advice couldn't be of help as I haven't found myself in a situation alike. I'm sorry and I wish you all the luck with her.
Little Birdie,
I'm told that there is a difference between 'ignoring' and 'not responding.' honestly, the difference is too subtle for me to discern. No matter, I must have made quite the nuisance of myself; I was "blocked."
Does not talking to you mean she ignores you meaning that fully or simply doesn't know what you mean to tell her? Other than that, the poem is rather nice. Gives a vibe of slowly losing hope, well captured.
No communication is the pits. It's hard if you're together, it's hard if you are separated. If a separation becomes a permanent end to the relationship, then it's letting go time and not caring to know because that chapter in your book is ended and you can close it and go on to the next chapter. If reconciliation is around the corner it won't be a true and healthy one if communication is still lacking. It's really tough when you don't know. If you have to, just let go. You expressed your frustration in a very healthy and heartfelt way to memorialize the question in a poem. Great therapy.
instead of "and" (2nd last line) try "then"
i think it will work nicely the and doesn't seem to bring the poem to a close like the last line-- "then" instead of "and" would be like an introduction to the ending--- know what I mean?
this really has a great flow , esp. the 2nd read around
It is really sweet of you to offer such thoughtful and compassionate advice; thank you from the bottom of my heart, and that is deep ;-)
The question is actually rhetorical, a companion to the piece of writing. Your answer is nonetheless appreciated and serves to demonstrate a tempered approach to any who need the answer :-)
Unfortunately, my situation is far more complex than I can or will describe. It is possible she will read this, but extremely unlikely I will ever "know."