Times, Days and Moments

a social commentary experiment in cinquain

Times, Days and Moments

These are the times of wishes for more plunder

These are the times of bitter remembrance

And here are moments calenders can't number

There are moments that aren't torn asunder

These are the times of too loud deliverance

These are the times that'r wholly missing wonder

These are the times lacking humble elegance

And we live in days that are blindly dogmatic

We live in days entirely pragmatic

These are the times for Love's Essence

Reviews

[WhereItResides]

Overall the poem is pretty good. If you get rid of all those and's it will flow much batter, it reads a bit awkwardly with them there. Other than that, it if a very good poem. The rhymes are nice and the word choice is good.

[abluehorseandflowers]

I believe I agree with you. Primarily from the fifth and tenth lines. Thank you.

[abluehorseandflowers]

Make that the third and sixth lines. Thank you again, it does read better.

[abluehorseandflowers]

Okay, so all of them except the third and the sixth :)