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A story poem in word-pictures. Wait, what?

This is the place where we first met.
This is the friend who introduced us.
This is where we had our first conversation,
three weeks later,
and found out we had more in common
than we thought.

This is the look you gave me
that made me want to ask you out.
This is where I worked up the courage,
and you did your best to turn me down
politely.
I asked again later,
you said it wasn't a good time.
Two days after
was when you asked me out.

This is the movie we went to
and I said I liked it
because you did,
but really there weren't enough
explosions.

This is the six days I spent
thinking how stupid I was
for surprising you
at your doorstep
with a kiss.

This is you calling me
to ask when I haven't called.

This is where we started moving
a little faster
and where our friends
started to comment
on how into each other
we were.
That's the dress I liked seeing you in.
This is the first time
we had sex.

This is the song we were
listening to
when you fell asleep
in my arms.
This is where you said
you loved me
and it took me too long
to respond.                             

This is the first time
we made love.

This is the Christmas
we spent with my family
where you said
you liked my beard
and I should keep it.

This is the apartment we almost got.

This is the sweater you got me
for my birthday,
which I couldn't wear anymore
after my dog threw up on it.
And I didn't like it much anyway.

This is where you got really mad at me
for dropping popcorn on the floor
and where I got mad at you
for getting mad about something
so stupid.

This is the first time
we fucked angry.

This was the first night
I spent on the couch.
That's the guy I thought
you might've been cheating on me with.
This is the restaurant
where we just ran out
of things to say to each other.

Right around this time,
I decided not to propose.

This is where you said
you were sick of my beard
and maybe I should shave.

This is when you told me
you needed to think
about what you wanted
and I didn't know what that meant
so I just left.

This is where I wondered if
you'd call me
and you didn't.

This is the street corner eight months later
where I ran into you
and the new guy.
That's when I tried to imagine you
coming over at midnight
and cheating on him
with me.

This is the letter you sent me
just trying to make sure
I was okay.

I burned it,
because I am.

Author's Note

I'm not so sure he is though, guys. What do you think?

Reviews

[Amortentia03]

I also really enjoyed how specific this was, the way it left no room for interpretation except for as to the feelings of the man was really refreshing. I definitely didn't see him burning the letter as him wanting to get rid of her, but rather not being able to bear having a reminder of her when she isn't his anymore. I think he burned it because he's not okay with everything he did that made him lose her--he's not okay at all.

[E. L. Foley]

I love how specific the story is--unexpected in a poem.

[zendikar]

As greatly portrayed as this is I find myself wondering whether or not he is ok it makes me want to ask you "is he ok"?... well? is he?

[tynamite]

Nice concept.

[VincentRayne]

I don't know. The fact that he said he wish she would come to him still leads me to believe that he still has feelings for her. In my case I would at least be okay with knowing that she still cares enough for me that she sent me a letter. Letters are something that you can cherish for a longer time period and in a different way than a text message or a phone call but it isn't a personal visit either.

Why he burnt it imakes an impression that he doesn't want to have any memories of her.

I really liked how this was written. excellent job!

[Linka and Lirrie]

Well I dont thinks hes really okay, but I dont think he is angry either.

I liked the way you wrote this, it made it seem more dramatic as it neared the end. Good job.

[Desert Dreamer]

I enjoyed the format, it creates images in my mind, like a slideshow. I felt the tension build up as I read, and the burning of the letter in the end leaves me feeling like this is just the beginning of a story. I don't think he is okay at all, I think he is burning inside and on the verge of acting on his feelings. I feel like this is the beginnings of a dark story. Very well written.

[Carolina Kel]

Since he burned the letter, I don't think he's okay.
I love the format for this and the story it presents. It's sad and a common occurance I'm sure. I would love to see something in this format with a happy ending, but I'm a romantic at heart. :)
Nicely done.